Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chart illustrates the consumption and production of electricity of ten countries in ranking in 2014.
Overall, China has dominated in both categories. The production of electricity surpassed the consumption in all countries besides Germany.
Placing at the first in ranking, China, has generated 5,398 billion kWh of electricity, while using 5,322 billion kWh of electricity. As for Korea, which was placed in tenth, produced 485.1 billion kWh and consumed 449.5 billion kWh of electricity. In the second ranking, United States’ consumption of electricity was 3866 billion kWh, while producing 4099 billion kWh.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, reaching only 94 words. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed. While you have identified some main features, such as China's dominance and the comparison between production and consumption, the lack of length prevents a full overview or a comprehensive selection of data from the ten countries provided. To improve, you must expand your analysis to include more data points and provide a more detailed comparison across the provided categories to ensure the task is fully developed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is logically organized with an introduction, an overview, and a body paragraph. However, the progression is limited due to the brevity of the text. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'while' and 'as for', but the overall structure feels underdeveloped. To achieve a higher band, ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus and that you use a wider variety of linking words to connect ideas more fluidly between sentences and paragraphs.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally appropriate for the task, using terms like 'dominated', 'surpassed', and 'generated'. However, the range is limited, and there are some awkward phrasings, such as 'in ranking' and 'placing at the first'. To improve, aim to use more precise collocations and a wider range of academic vocabulary related to data description, such as 'exceeded', 'accounted for', or 'figures indicate'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are some grammatical errors, such as 'China, has generated' (unnecessary comma) and 'placing at the first in ranking' (awkward phrasing). While these errors do not impede communication, the limited length restricts the demonstration of a wider range of complex grammatical structures. Focus on improving sentence variety and ensuring subject-verb agreement and punctuation are consistently accurate.
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