Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart illustrate the information of manufacturing and utilization of electricity in top ten nations in 2014.

Overall, it is clear that China was the top producer and consumer of electricity, while least production in Germany and Lowest utilization of electricity by Korea throughout the period.

Moving into more detail, China was ranked no.1 as producer of electricity by 5,398 billion kWh and used 5,322 billion kWh electricity in 2014. United States ranked second with manufacturing 4,099 billion kWh, whereas utilized energy accounted as 3,866 billion kWh. Russians were making and using electricity at approximately same level, 1,057 and 1,038 billion kWh respectively. Japan had manufactured electric energy at 936 and used 856 billion kWh throughout the year.

Moving further, the manufacturing of electricity Canada, France, Brazil, Germany and Korea followed as 618, 51, 530, 526 and 485 billion kWh, while utilization accounted as 499 in Canada, 462 in France, 455 in Brazil, 582 in Germany and 449 in Korea, respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the top ten countries and comparing production and consumption. The overview is clear, highlighting the dominance of China and the relative positions of other nations. However, the data presentation in the final paragraph is slightly confusing due to the listing of figures for multiple countries in a single sentence, which makes it difficult for the reader to track the specific data points. While the main features are selected, the reporting could be more analytical by grouping countries with similar trends rather than just listing them sequentially.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs. Cohesive devices such as 'Moving into more detail' and 'Moving further' are used to transition between ideas. However, the referencing in the final paragraph is somewhat mechanical and repetitive, particularly the use of 'respectively' at the end of long lists. The paragraphing is appropriate, but the flow within the final paragraph is hindered by the dense presentation of data, which makes the progression of information feel slightly cluttered.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task, using terms like 'manufacturing', 'utilization', and 'accounted for'. There are some minor inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'Russians were making' (referring to the country, not the people) and 'manufacturing of electricity Canada' (missing a preposition). While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey the meaning, it lacks the precision and variety required for a higher band. The repetition of 'billion kWh' is necessary given the data, but the overall lexical variety remains somewhat limited.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('The bar chart illustrate') and missing articles ('ranked no.1 as producer'). Additionally, the sentence 'manufacturing of electricity Canada... followed as 618' is grammatically awkward. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. The control over punctuation is generally acceptable, but the sentence structures are occasionally clunky due to the way data is integrated.

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