Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given bar chart demonstrates the information regarding the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in the year 2014.The calibration of data is done in billion kWh.
Overall, the china was at top in both categories, as its consumption and production both were the highest. And the country which was second highest in both categories was the United states. However, the Korea rep was at last with minimum generation of electricity and its usage.
In 2014, the country which produces the highest electricity around 5,398 billion kWh and also used the highest number of electricity about 5,322 billion kWh was china . Secondly the country which is at second number out of all other 9 countries was the united stated as it generates approximately four thousand billion kWh. and it used electricity around 3,866 billion kWh.
The Germany is the only country which uses electricity more than its generation. However the Korea rep is at last because it was at low in both categories.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the chart, such as identifying China and the USA as the top producers and consumers. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you mention the top countries, you fail to provide a comprehensive comparison of the ten countries listed, instead focusing only on a few. The data reporting is accurate, but the lack of a clear overview of the trends across the entire dataset limits the score. To improve, ensure you group countries by performance levels rather than listing them individually, and provide a more analytical summary of the relationship between production and consumption across the group.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is hindered by repetitive sentence structures and a lack of sophisticated cohesive devices. While you use transition words like 'Overall' and 'However', the connection between sentences is often mechanical. For example, the transition between the overview and the body paragraphs is abrupt. The referencing is sometimes unclear, such as 'the Korea rep', which lacks formal naming. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear thematic focus that transitions smoothly into the next.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety required for a higher band. You rely on basic terms like 'highest', 'top', and 'at last'. There are also issues with word choice and capitalization, such as 'the china' and 'the united stated'. The phrase 'calibration of data is done' is unnatural in this context. To improve, incorporate more academic vocabulary related to data interpretation, such as 'surpassed', 'accounted for', or 'marginal difference', and pay closer attention to proper noun capitalization and standard terminology.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentences, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation that occasionally impede readability. Issues include missing articles ('the china'), incorrect verb forms ('the country which produces... was china'), and inconsistent capitalization. Punctuation errors, such as spacing before commas and periods, are also present. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors prevents a higher score. Focus on subject-verb agreement, consistent use of articles, and standardizing your punctuation to improve the overall accuracy of your writing.
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