Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar chart illustrates the production and consumption of top ten contries in 2014.
Overall, the production of elecricty is largest and most dominant in over the period, While Korea. rep production oof elecricity is smallest recorded. Althgh china was peaked in both categories in 2014.
Looking att the details, In china the electriciy production was 5,398 billion KWh and consumption was recorded at 5,322 billion KWh. Both was peaked in over the period. The second number is USA the production was 4.099 billion KWH and consumption was 3,666 billion KWh. followed by russia production was 1,057 billion KWh and consumption was 1.038.the next nmber are japan production was 936.2 and consumption was 856.7. In india production was 871 and comsumption was 698.8 blln KWh. canada was produced electricity at 618.9 and consumption was 499.9 billion KWh. then france production of electricity 561.2 and consumption was 462.9 billion KWh. the second last is geeermany produuction 526.6 and consumption 582.6 billion KWh. In finally Korea. Rep electricity of production was 485.1 and consumpton was 449.5.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the data, identifying China as the leader and Korea as the lowest. However, the overview is poorly constructed and contains confusing phrasing, such as 'Korea. rep production oof elecricity is smallest recorded'. While the key data points are included, the report lacks a clear, analytical structure. The comparison between production and consumption is mentioned, but the presentation is largely a list of figures rather than a synthesis of trends. To improve, focus on grouping countries by their performance rather than listing them sequentially, and ensure the overview clearly summarizes the most significant differences between production and consumption.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks logical paragraphing, as it is essentially one long block of text. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as 'The second number is USA' or 'the next nmber are japan'. The progression of ideas is mechanical, relying on a repetitive 'country name + production + consumption' structure. There is no clear transition between the overview and the body details. To reach a higher band, you must use clear paragraph breaks and a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'In contrast', 'Furthermore', 'Conversely') to guide the reader through the comparisons.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors such as 'elecricty', 'comsumption', 'blln', and 'geeermany'. The phrasing is often unnatural, for example, 'the second number is USA' and 'the next nmber are japan'. There is little attempt to use a range of vocabulary to describe the data; instead, the same verbs and nouns are repeated throughout the text. To improve, focus on learning synonyms for 'production' and 'consumption' and practice using precise reporting verbs like 'surpassed', 'accounted for', or 'exceeded'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('Both was peaked'), article usage ('In china'), and sentence structure ('In finally Korea. Rep electricity of production was...'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with many run-on sentences and incorrect capitalization. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, they are often faulty. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring every sentence has a clear subject and verb, and proofread for common errors like missing articles and incorrect verb tenses.
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