Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given bar graph represents highest top ten countries for the manufacture and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Overall, it can be noticed that, the huge number of electricity, and consumption, at China. Moreover, the less number of electricity production as well as, consumption from Korea, Rep.
To start with, the China was highest number of electricity manufacture and consume in 2014. The ratio were production 5398 kwh and consumption 5322kwh. Both are around same. The production ration 4099 kwh, and consumption ration was less 3866 kwh, at United States. As well as, at Russia, production 1057 kwh. and use of electricity 1038 kwh. In Japan 936.2 kwh production and 856.7 consumption electricity.
At India 871 kwh production, and 698.8 kwh consumption. There are other's countries electricity consumption as well as, production ratio were around same in 2014. However, these countries were used less electricity and also, produce less electricity in 2014.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the data, such as identifying China as the leader in both production and consumption. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you mention several countries, the comparisons are limited, and the data presentation is often repetitive. For example, stating 'both are around same' for China is vague. To reach a higher band, you should group the data more effectively—perhaps by comparing the top three countries against the rest—and provide more precise comparative language rather than simply listing figures for each country individually. The overview is present but lacks a clear synthesis of the trends shown in the chart.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'As well as, at Russia' and 'To start with, the China' are grammatically awkward and do not function well as logical connectors. The progression of ideas within paragraphs is somewhat disjointed, as the transition between countries feels like a list rather than a cohesive analysis. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words (e.g., 'in contrast', 'similarly', 'whereas') would significantly improve the flow and logical progression of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'number', 'production', and 'consumption'. There are several instances of incorrect word choice, such as 'manufacture' instead of 'generation' for electricity, and 'ratio' used incorrectly to describe raw figures. Additionally, phrases like 'the huge number of electricity' are unnatural; electricity is an uncountable noun and should be described in terms of 'output' or 'volume'. To improve, you should focus on using more precise collocations related to data reporting and avoid repeating the same nouns and verbs throughout the text.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are persistent issues with articles (e.g., 'the China', 'the less number'), subject-verb agreement ('The ratio were'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are simple or fragmented, lacking the complexity required for higher bands. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary commas used throughout the text (e.g., 'consumption, at China'). To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree, and using articles correctly before country names and nouns.
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