Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The diagram illustrates the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Overall, the highest country that has the proportions of the productions and consumption of electricity in 2014 was China with almost the same total amount 5, 398 production and consumption was 5,322. China is number one because they are considered the highest population in the world and one of the largest countries. Meanwhile, the lowest consumption was Korea Rep. with nearly the same total consumption of electricity 449.5 vs the production with 485.1.
In detail, There are 10 countries involved in the survey for the consumption and production of electricity which on the top list was China with the highest percentages among the other countries. the consumption was 5,322 and the production was 5, 398. Then the second was the United states with the highest percentages in production 4, 099 then the consumption was 3,866.
Meanwhile the Russia, Japan, India, Canada, France, Brazil, Korea Rep. which has not too far from each total percentage and the production and consumption of electricity. Their production is higher than the consumption. In contrast to Germany, the higher the consumption rate is 582.5 over the production rate with 526.6.
In summary, The production of electricity in 10 countries is always ahead compare to the consumption of electricity. In the exemption of Germany which slightly changed the rate the consumption is nearly ahead to the production.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the task by identifying the main features of the bar chart. However, the analysis is hampered by the inclusion of irrelevant personal commentary, such as speculating on why China is 'number one' due to population size, which is not supported by the data provided. While the key figures for production and consumption are mentioned, the comparison between countries is somewhat repetitive and lacks a clear, analytical structure. The summary at the end is accurate regarding the general trend, but the overall development of the data is hindered by these digressions and a lack of precise comparative language.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, the phrase 'In detail' is used awkwardly to introduce the second paragraph, and the transition 'In the exemption of' is non-standard. The referencing is sometimes unclear, particularly when grouping countries together without specifying their individual data points. While there is a logical progression from an overview to specific details, the flow is frequently interrupted by awkward phrasing and repetitive sentence structures, which limits the overall coherence of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing the student to convey the basic information. However, there is a lack of precision and variety. The student frequently uses the word 'percentages' incorrectly, as the data represents raw units (TWh) rather than percentages. There are also issues with word choice, such as 'the highest country' instead of 'the country with the highest production'. The repetition of basic terms like 'total amount' and 'rate' limits the range. To reach a higher band, the student should focus on using more precise terminology related to data description and avoiding incorrect mathematical terminology.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but accuracy is inconsistent. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the highest country that has the proportions... was China') and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'which has not too far from each total percentage'). Punctuation is also problematic, with inconsistent comma usage and capitalization errors. While the meaning is generally clear, these grammatical slips occur frequently enough to cause some distraction. The student needs to focus on sentence construction and ensuring that complex structures are used correctly to avoid distorting the intended meaning.
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