Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar chart shows how much a country produce and consume electricity. Top ten countries are shown in this chart.
In China, they produce over 5 thousands also consume electricity almost the same amount which ranks the highest. United States occupys the second place. However their number of production and consumption is around 4 thousands. Then Russia occupys third position and their production and consumption is around one thousand. After that, Japan occupys the fourth position while producing and consuming 936.3 and 856.7. Then comes India which occupys 5th position. Their production and consumption number is 871 and 698.8. Again, Canada and France occupys 6th and 7th position. Their production and consumption rate is 618.9, 499.9, 561.2 and 462.9. At last, Brazil, Germany and Korea occupys the 8th, 9th and 10th position. Their production and consumption amount is 530.7, 455.8, 526.6, 582.5, 485.1, 449.5.
As we can see in the chart, China and United States produce and consume a huge amount of electricity and they occupy the first two position.
Therefore, the first ten most electricity producing and consuming country is illustrated while comparing their electricity amount.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the chart, such as identifying China and the USA as the leading countries. However, the report is largely a list of data points rather than a synthesis of information. The description of the data for countries like Canada, France, Brazil, Germany, and Korea is repetitive and lacks analytical comparison. To improve, you should group countries with similar trends or highlight significant gaps between the top and bottom performers rather than listing every figure individually. The overview is also quite weak, as it merely restates the prompt rather than highlighting the most significant trends or patterns observed in the data.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is mechanical. You rely heavily on repetitive sentence structures such as 'Then [country] occupies the [number] position'. The use of cohesive devices is limited and often feels forced, such as the repetitive use of 'Then' and 'After that' to start sentences. To achieve a higher band, you should use a wider variety of linking words and transition phrases to connect your ideas more fluidly. Additionally, ensure that your paragraphing serves to group related information logically rather than just breaking up the list of countries.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive. You frequently use the same verbs, such as 'occupy', 'produce', and 'consume', throughout the text. While the terminology is accurate for the context of the task, there is a lack of variety in your word choice. To improve, try to use synonyms or different ways to describe the data, such as 'generate', 'utilize', 'rank', or 'account for'. There are also some minor errors in word form, such as '5 thousands' instead of '5,000' or '5 thousand'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Subject-verb agreement is a recurring issue, for example, 'United States occupys' (should be 'occupies') and 'countries... is illustrated' (should be 'are illustrated'). Additionally, there are punctuation and spacing issues, such as the extra spaces after 'However'. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to lower the score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent verb tense usage will significantly improve your accuracy.
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