Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The bar chart shows that in 2014 china is the most rated country for production and electricity. where its production is about 5398 billion kwh while its consumption is 5322 billion kwh. KOREA rep is most under rated country for its consumption and production of electricity is lower than all of the above. there is a small difference between CHINA and US rates. whereas an abrupt change between US and RUSSIA. this is the most abrupt change I am seeing there. Onwards RUSSIA there is small change in every country I am seeing. On the other hand the electricity produce the most in CHINA and UNITED STATES. there is most surprisingly thing I HAVE SEEN here that INDIA is on 5 number. At the end I will tell you that INDIA is the most familiar country now and on number 2. the most shocking thing here is china has the highest rate of electricity.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to provide a clear overview or a structured summary of the data. While it mentions China and the US, it lacks a systematic comparison of the top ten countries. The writing is highly subjective, using informal language like 'most rated', 'under rated', and 'shocking thing', which is inappropriate for an Academic Task 1 report. Furthermore, the data interpretation is confusing; for instance, the claim that India is 'on number 2' is factually incorrect based on the provided chart. The response does not effectively select and report the main features, resulting in a disorganized presentation of the information.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks logical organization and paragraphing. It is written as a single, disjointed block of text. There is no clear progression of ideas; the writer jumps between countries without a coherent structure. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, such as the repetitive use of 'there is' and 'I am seeing'. The lack of paragraphing and the absence of linking words make the text difficult to follow, as the ideas do not flow logically from one point to the next.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student relies on basic, informal, and often inaccurate terminology, such as 'most rated', 'under rated', and 'abrupt change'. There is no attempt to use academic vocabulary related to data analysis (e.g., 'surpassed', 'accounted for', 'significant difference'). The misuse of words like 'familiar' to describe a country's ranking further demonstrates a lack of control over lexical choice. The range is insufficient to convey the information with any degree of precision or academic tone.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede clarity. There are persistent issues with sentence structure, such as fragments and run-on sentences. Examples include 'where its production is about 5398 billion kwh' and 'there is most surprisingly thing I HAVE SEEN here that INDIA is on 5 number.' Punctuation is inconsistent, with missing capital letters for proper nouns and incorrect sentence boundaries. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, poorly constructed sentences. The frequent errors in basic grammar and syntax make the text difficult to read.
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