Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart compares the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Overall, it is clear that all countries rate production and consumption of electricity was the declined over the period. While china was the highest categories over the period whereas Korea was the lowest categories over the period.

China was the remined relatively stable in both categories in 2010.United States was the remained stable in both categories. In Russian steadily fell in both categories. Japan was the steadily fell in both categories.

In India production was the 871 and consumption was the698.8. In Canada , France, Brazil, Germany and Korea was steadily declined overall. in camparion China was highest and

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. Furthermore, the content is problematic: the prompt asks for data from 2014, but the text incorrectly refers to 2010. The summary is incomplete, ending abruptly mid-sentence, and fails to provide a comprehensive overview of the main features or meaningful comparisons between the countries. The data provided for India is specific, but the overall analysis lacks the necessary detail and synthesis required for an Academic Task 1 response. Because the response is under-length and fails to cover the requirements of the task, it falls into the lower bands.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay lacks a logical structure. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the ideas within the paragraphs are disjointed and often contradictory. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and frequently misused, such as the repetitive use of 'in both categories' and 'was the'. The progression of information is unclear, and the abrupt ending suggests a lack of planning and control over the flow of the response. Referencing is often confusing, making it difficult for the reader to follow the intended comparison between the countries listed.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student relies heavily on basic phrasing like 'was the' and 'categories', which does not demonstrate the range required for a higher band. There are frequent errors in word choice, such as 'rate production' instead of 'rates of production' and 'remined' (likely a misspelling of remained). The lack of variety in descriptive language prevents the student from accurately reporting the data trends. To improve, the student needs to incorporate a wider range of synonyms and more precise terminology related to data analysis.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The grammar is consistently inaccurate throughout the text. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'all countries rate production... was the declined') and sentence structure (e.g., 'China was the remined relatively stable'). The use of articles and prepositions is often incorrect or missing. The response consists mostly of simple, error-prone sentences, with no evidence of complex structures. These persistent errors frequently impede communication, making the text difficult to read and understand. Significant improvement in basic sentence construction and grammatical accuracy is required.

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