Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-08-31
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The bar chart illustrates the top ten counties for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Overall, it is clear that china had the highest number of electricity production and consumption while Korea rep had the lowest number of electricity production and consumption. In addition, there was a significant difference between the largest and lowest number of electricity production and consumption.
Looking at the details, the China stood at production 5,398 and consumption 5,322. It was followed by United States with production 4,099 and consumption 3,866 which was slightly lower than china. Similarly, Japan had production 936.2 and consumption 856.7 while India had production 871 and consumption 698.8 which was higher than Japan.
In comparison, Brazil had production 530.7 and consumption 455.8 while Germany had production 526.6 and consumption 582.5. In Korea rep had only production 485.1 and consumption 449.5 which was slightly lower than Germany. By the end of the period china was most popular electricity production and consumption while Korea rep was most common electricity.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers the main features of the bar chart, including the highest and lowest producers and consumers. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical, simply listing data points rather than synthesising the information effectively. The overview is present but could be more analytical. While the task is addressed, the comparison between countries is limited to simple statements like 'higher than' or 'lower than'. To improve, you should group the data more logically (e.g., comparing the top tier with the lower tier) and focus on identifying trends or significant gaps rather than just transcribing the figures provided in the chart.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat repetitive and basic. Phrases like 'Looking at the details' and 'In comparison' are used, but the flow between sentences is occasionally disjointed. For instance, the transition between the overview and the body paragraphs could be smoother. The referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the final sentence where the phrasing 'most common electricity' is confusing and lacks logical connection to the previous data. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear focus would enhance the coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. You rely heavily on repeating the words 'production' and 'consumption' throughout the text. There are also some awkward word choices, such as 'Korea rep' (which should be 'the Republic of Korea') and the phrase 'most popular electricity', which is not appropriate in this context. To reach a higher band, you should use a wider range of synonyms and collocations related to data reporting, such as 'generated', 'utilised', 'outperformed', or 'surpassed', and ensure that geographical names are written correctly.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Issues include missing articles (e.g., 'the China', 'the United States'), incorrect prepositions, and subject-verb agreement errors (e.g., 'In Korea rep had only...'). Some sentences are poorly constructed, such as 'china was most popular electricity production', which lacks a verb or clear meaning. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to affect the overall clarity of the report. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for articles and prepositions would be beneficial.
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