Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-01
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given glance illustrates top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Firstly, china had highest production and consumption of electricity in the year 2014. it was 5,398 billion kWh and 5,322 billion kWh. Next second highest producation and consumption is united states. it was 4,099 and 3,866 billion kWh. Moreover, russia had came down and reached 1,057 and 1,038 billion kHw. On the other hands japan, india and canada are slightly declined and it is approximately 499.9 to 936.2 billion kWh.
Secondly, France and brazil are slightly remained stable. it was around 455.8 to 561.2 billion kWh of producation and consumption. Additionally, germany had slightly rose up. it was 526.6 billion kWh of producation and 582.5 billion kWh of consumption. However, korea rep had lowest production and consumption. it was 485.1 and 449.5 billion kWh.
Overall, china and united states had highest of producation and consumption. compare to brazil and korea rep.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the chart, identifying the top producers and consumers. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you mention China and the US, the grouping of other countries is imprecise. For example, stating that countries 'slightly declined' or 'remained stable' is not supported by the data provided, as the chart shows a static snapshot of 2014 rather than a trend over time. To improve, focus on comparing the specific figures between countries rather than describing them as 'declining' or 'rising', which implies a time-series element that is not present in the data.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For instance, 'Moreover, russia had came down' is an inappropriate transition because there is no evidence of a trend. The referencing is sometimes unclear, such as 'it was 499.9 to 936.2 billion kWh', where the pronoun 'it' does not clearly refer back to the group of countries mentioned. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that pronouns clearly refer to their antecedents would enhance the flow of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, with several spelling errors such as 'producation' (production) and 'kHw' (kWh). You rely heavily on basic terms like 'highest' and 'lowest'. While you attempt to use some technical terms, the lack of precision in word choice—such as using 'glance' instead of 'chart' or 'graph'—limits the score. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more varied vocabulary related to data comparison, such as 'surpassed', 'accounted for', or 'a significant margin', and ensure accurate spelling of technical units.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement and tense usage, such as 'russia had came down' (should be 'Russia had a lower output') and 'germany had slightly rose up' (should be 'Germany had a slightly higher output'). Additionally, many sentences are fragmented or lack proper punctuation, such as 'it was 4,099 and 3,866 billion kWh.' The range of structures is limited to simple sentences. To improve, focus on using more complex sentence structures and ensuring consistent verb tenses when describing static data.
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