Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-01
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The given bar chart illustrates the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014:
In china, 5,398, electricity is produced whereas 5,322 amount of electricity is consumed whereas in united states 4,099 electricity is produced meanwhile 3, 866 of elctricity is consumed
On the other hand in russia 1,057 billion of electricity is produced whereas 3,866 billion of electricity is consumed
On the other hand in russia 1,057 of electricity is produced whereas the amount of electricity consumed is 1,038. similarly, in japan 936.2 of electricity is produced whereas 856.7 of electricty is consumed .
Similarly in india, 871 of electricity is produced whereas 698.8 of electricity is consumed. Whereas in canada 618.9 of electricity is produced whereas 499.9 electricity is consumed.
On the hand, in canada, 618.9 billion of electricity is produced whereas in the same country 499.9 billion of electricity is consumed.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While the student identifies the main features of the data, the presentation is fragmented and repetitive. There is no clear overview or summary of the trends, and the data is presented as a list of figures rather than a cohesive analysis. Comparisons are attempted but are often inaccurate or confusing, such as the contradictory data provided for Russia. The lack of a proper introduction and conclusion further limits the development of the task.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text lacks logical organization and progression. The use of paragraphing is highly irregular, with excessive white space and disjointed sentences that do not flow into one another. Cohesive devices are used in a repetitive and mechanical manner, such as the constant use of 'whereas' and 'on the other hand'. Referencing is unclear, and the overall structure is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between countries.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive, relying almost exclusively on the words 'electricity', 'produced', and 'consumed'. There is no attempt to use a wider range of vocabulary to describe trends or data points. Spelling errors are frequent, such as 'elctricity' and 'china' (which should be capitalized). The lack of variety in word choice prevents the student from demonstrating the lexical range required for higher bands.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple, repetitive sentence structures. There are frequent errors in punctuation, capitalization, and number formatting (e.g., '3, 866'). The lack of control over basic sentence construction and the presence of numerous errors in data presentation impede clarity. There is no evidence of complex sentence structures, and the frequent grammatical slips make the text difficult to read.
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