Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The given bar graph below illustrate the top ten countries for the construction and utilization of electricity in 2014.

Overall, china country had maximum developed of production and consumption of electricity and least in Korea, rep. in the construction and utilization of electricity in the year 2014.

United states is on the second rank of electricity production 4,099 and consumption 3,866. Russia comes on third rank in production and utilization of electricity 1,057 and 1,038. Where as other countries like japan with 9362 and 8567 of electricity, India with 871 and 6988 of electricity, canada with 6189 and 4999 of electricity and where as france and brazil country are almost same in the ranks, france with 5612 and 4629 and brazil with 5307 and 4558 of electricity. Germany having 5266 in production and 5825 in consumption of electricity however, china country having maximum and comes on first rank in construction and utilization of electricity 5,398 and 5,322. korea is minimum in consumption and production of eletricity 485 and

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response covers the main features of the data, such as identifying the highest and lowest countries. However, the report is incomplete as it ends abruptly mid-sentence. While the overview is present, the data presentation is inconsistent; for instance, the figures for Japan (9362) and India (871) appear to be misread or contain significant typographical errors compared to standard chart data. The comparison between countries is attempted but lacks clarity due to the disorganized structure and inaccurate data reporting. To improve, ensure all data points are accurately transcribed and the summary is fully completed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is hindered by the incomplete ending and repetitive phrasing. Cohesive devices are used in a mechanical and sometimes inaccurate way, such as the repetitive use of 'and where as'. The referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparisons between the ten countries. The lack of a concluding sentence or a completed final point significantly impacts the overall coherence of the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often inappropriate for an academic report. The student uses 'construction' instead of 'production' throughout the text, which is a significant word-choice error. There is also repetitive use of basic terms like 'maximum', 'least', and 'rank'. Some numbers are presented in a confusing format, such as '9362' and '871', which suggests a lack of precision in reporting data. To reach a higher band, you should use more varied and precise terminology related to data analysis, such as 'generated', 'consumed', 'surpassed', and 'accounted for'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'china country had maximum developed'), incorrect article usage, and sentence fragments. The structure is largely simple, and attempts at complex sentences are often faulty or incomplete. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and the abrupt ending of the final sentence. Improving control over basic sentence structure and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would be beneficial.

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