Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

This bar chart illustrates the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014

China remains the highest all over the time, while Korea. Rep remains the lowest among the United States extreme, while other countries are equal.

China's production and consumption increased from 5,322 billion KWH to 5,398 billion KWH, then Korea's, which declined by 485.1 billion KWh to 449.5 billion Kwh then united states increased from 866 billion KWh to 4,099 billion KWh

Then Russia increased from 1,038 billion kWh to 1,057 billion kWh, then Japan from 856.7 billion kWh to 936.2 billion kWh. It means Russia and Japan remain the same over all the period of time then india increased over the time canada increased as well they both remain the same like that france and brazil remain the same and germany its remain production and consumption mostly remain the same in different countries some are increased and decreased over the period of decade

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to accurately report the data provided in the chart. The student misinterprets the figures, claiming that production and consumption 'increased' for countries where the data actually shows specific values for a single year (2014). Furthermore, the analysis is confused and contradictory, stating that countries 'remain the same' despite the data showing distinct differences between production and consumption levels. The overview is missing, and the attempt to summarize the main features is unsuccessful because the data interpretation is factually incorrect. The response does not adequately address the task requirements to select and report main features or make relevant comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks logical organization. It is written as a single, poorly structured paragraph with no clear progression of ideas. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and often inappropriate, such as the repetitive use of 'then' to link unrelated sentences. Referencing is unclear, and the lack of paragraphing makes the text difficult to follow. There is no clear distinction between an introduction, body, or conclusion, and the flow of information is disjointed, which significantly hinders the reader's ability to understand the data being presented.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student relies heavily on basic verbs like 'increased', 'declined', and 'remain', often using them incorrectly in the context of the provided data. There is no attempt to use a range of vocabulary appropriate for describing statistical data, such as 'surpassed', 'accounted for', or 'a significant disparity'. The misuse of terms like 'all over the time' and 'extreme' further demonstrates a lack of control over lexical items, making the description of the chart imprecise and confusing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are significant issues with sentence structure, such as run-on sentences and fragments (e.g., 'while Korea. Rep remains the lowest'). Subject-verb agreement is inconsistent, and punctuation is largely absent or misused. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, poorly constructed sentences. The frequent errors in tense and word order make the text difficult to parse, and the overall lack of grammatical control prevents the clear expression of the intended information.

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