Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In the given bar chart shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
The first top country was China in the production of electricity ,its production was 5398 billion kWh in 2014, and the consumption of china was 5322 billion kWh. China saves electricity 76 billion kWh .The second top country was USA with production of 4099 and consumption was 3866 billion kWh . The third top country was Russia that s production 1057 and consumption was 1038 billion kWh . On the number fourth was japan that production 936.2 and consumption 856.7 billion kWh in 2014 . The fifth number was occupied by India that production more than consumption in 2014 , the production was 871 and consumption 698.8 billion kWh .
On sixth number was Canada that produce electricity 618.9 and consume 499.9 billion kWh . The country France , Brazil , Germany and Korea was produce electricity 561.2 to 485.1 and consumption 462.9 to 449.5 in 2014.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the task by identifying the top ten countries and their production/consumption figures. However, the overview is missing; a successful response must highlight the main trends, such as China and the USA significantly outperforming other nations, or the fact that most countries produce more than they consume. The report is largely a list of data points rather than a summary. While the key figures are included, the lack of a clear overview and the mechanical listing of statistics prevent a higher score. To improve, ensure you group data logically and provide a clear summary of the overall trends observed in the chart.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organised into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is mechanical. The use of cohesive devices is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on 'The first top country', 'The second top country', and 'On sixth number'. These phrases are somewhat unnatural and do not facilitate smooth transitions between sentences. Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the final paragraph where the grouping of four countries is confusingly phrased. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words and phrases to connect your ideas more fluidly and ensure that comparisons between countries are clearly articulated rather than just listed.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. There is significant repetition of basic terms like 'production', 'consumption', 'country', and 'billion kWh'. The phrasing 'The fifth number was occupied by India' is slightly unnatural. There are also minor errors in word choice, such as 'that s production' (possessive error) and 'was produce' (tense error). To achieve a higher band, try to use synonyms and more sophisticated reporting verbs or nouns, such as 'generated', 'utilized', 'surpassed', or 'figures for'. Expanding your range of vocabulary will help make your writing more engaging and precise.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with subject-verb agreement and tense usage, such as 'In the given bar chart shows' (incorrect sentence structure), 'that s production' (missing apostrophe), and 'The country France... was produce' (incorrect verb form). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces before commas and inconsistent capitalization. While the meaning is generally clear, these errors occur throughout the text. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree, and proofreading for punctuation and tense consistency.
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