Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

323In this bar as the china is wast populated country.They produce about 5398 billion kWh every year and they also consume 5322 billions kWh every year and the next country is United States produced 4099 billions kWh every year and they consume 3866 billions kWh every year . On the other hand the third country is Russia is also big country they produce 1057 billions kWh every year and they consume 1038 billions kWh every year and the next country is the Japan. The Japan is also developing country they produce 936.2billions kWh every year and also consuming 856.7 billions kWh. And the number 5 is india it also a wast populated country they produce 871 billions kWh of electricity and consuming 698.8 billions kWh of electricity every year . The number 6 country is Canada they produce 618.9 billions kWh of electricity and consuming 499.9 kWh of electricity every year the last one is Korea . The Korea produce 485.1 kWh billions of electricity every year and also consuming 499.5 kWh of electricity every year .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response covers the main features of the data by listing the countries and their respective production and consumption figures. However, it fails to provide a clear overview or summary of the trends, such as identifying that China and the USA are significantly ahead of the other nations. The response is essentially a list of data points rather than a comparative analysis. To improve, you should group countries by their performance levels and highlight the most significant differences or similarities, rather than simply transcribing the figures for each country in order.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response lacks paragraphing, which makes it difficult to follow. The flow is repetitive, relying heavily on 'they produce' and 'they consume' to connect ideas. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link the data points; instead, the sentences are strung together with 'and' or 'also'. To achieve a higher band, you should use clear paragraph structures (e.g., an introduction, a body paragraph for high producers, and a concluding summary) and a wider variety of linking words like 'whereas', 'in contrast', or 'similarly' to compare the data.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'wast populated' (likely meaning 'vastly populated') and 'billions kWh' are used repeatedly. There is little attempt to use varied terminology to describe the data, such as 'surpass', 'account for', 'the majority of', or 'figures for'. The spelling errors, such as 'wast' for 'vast', and the awkward phrasing regarding the countries' status (e.g., 'the Japan is also developing country') hinder the clarity of the report. Expanding your vocabulary to include more precise academic terms is essential.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors, particularly with articles ('the china', 'the Japan', 'the India') and subject-verb agreement ('The Korea produce'). Sentence structures are simple and repetitive, lacking the complexity required for higher bands. There are also issues with punctuation and capitalization. To improve, focus on mastering the use of articles with country names and practice constructing more complex sentences using relative clauses or participial phrases to combine information, which will help reduce the repetitive nature of your writing.

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