Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The provided bar graph depicts how much amount of electricity was generated and consumed by different countries in the year 2014.
Overall, it is vividly seen that china was the top producer and consumer of electricity whereas Korea used and produce significantly less electric power.
A glance is adequate enough to analyze that a difference of 76 billion kWh was observed in the production and consumption of electricity in China.Both Russia and Japan recorded almost same quantity of electric power generated and used. This followed by india which generate more energy then it used.
Turning to rest of details,Canada and France also consumed less electricity than it’s production. Surprisingly,Germany was the only country where people expend more electric power than generated. About 25 kWh energy saved in Brazil after its usuage. The power production and consumption for Korea was 485.1 kWh and 449.5 kWh respectively.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While you have identified the main features and made some comparisons, the analysis is somewhat superficial. You have selected key data points, such as China's leading position and the comparison between production and consumption, but the lack of sufficient length means the task is not fully addressed. To improve, ensure you provide a more comprehensive overview and include more detailed comparisons across the data set to reach the required length and depth of analysis.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the information. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally awkward, such as 'A glance is adequate enough to analyze' and 'Turning to rest of details'. The progression of ideas is generally logical, but the transitions between sentences could be smoother to improve the flow. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and phrases more naturally to connect your ideas and data points.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. You rely on basic terms like 'amount of electricity', 'used', and 'produced'. There are also some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'expend more electric power' instead of 'consume' or 'use'. To improve, try to incorporate more specific terminology related to energy production and consumption, and ensure you use words in their correct context to demonstrate a more sophisticated range of vocabulary.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are several grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('india which generate', 'people expend more... than generated') and punctuation errors. Additionally, there are awkward phrasings like 'almost same quantity' (missing 'the') and 'it’s production' (incorrect use of apostrophe). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to lower the score. Focusing on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and article usage will help improve your accuracy.
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