Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar chart gives information about the top ten countries such as China, United States, Russia, Japan, India, Canada, France, Brazil, Germany, Korean for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Units are measured in billion killo-watt hour's.

Overall, the production of the china was higher than that of United States. China had the largest amount in production and consumption of electricity, while the korea is had least amount in both catagaries of electricity.

First of all, China is the no one rank in production of electricity, with 5,398 billion kWh, its consumption stood at 5,322. Subsequently, United states ranked second, producing 4,009 billion kWh, consuming 3,866 billion kWh. Next, Russia ranked third, generating 1,057 billion kWh, consuming 1,038 billion kWh. Following this, Japan took the fourth spot, generating 936.2 billion kWh, consuming 856.7 billion kWh respectively. A similar trend was observerd in India and Canada, india produced 871 billion kWh, used 698.8, whereas Canada generated 618.9 billion kWh but consumed less at 499.9 billion kWh.

In terms of France, it was positioned seven, creating 561.2 billion kWh, absorbing 462.9 billion kWh. Brazil placed 8, manufacturing 530.7 billion kWh, gripping 455.8 billion kWh. Germany rated 9, yielding 530.7 billion kWh, intense 455.8 billion kWh Finally, South Korea had the lowest figures on the chart, producing and consuming just under 500 billion kWh.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the top ten countries and comparing production and consumption figures. You successfully highlighted the main features, such as China's leading position and South Korea's lower figures. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical, listing data point by point rather than synthesizing the information more effectively. To reach a higher band, focus on grouping countries with similar trends more clearly and ensuring that the comparisons are more analytical rather than just a recitation of the provided statistics.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. Cohesive devices such as 'Subsequently', 'Next', and 'Following this' are used to guide the reader. However, some transitions feel repetitive or slightly forced. The referencing is generally clear, but the flow between sentences could be improved by varying the structure of your comparisons. The paragraphing is appropriate, and the overall progression of ideas is logical, which helps the reader follow the information presented in the bar chart.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, including terms like 'production', 'consumption', and 'generating'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choices, such as 'absorbing', 'gripping', and 'intense' (used as a verb), which are not appropriate in this context. Additionally, there are minor spelling errors like 'catagaries' and 'observerd'. To improve, focus on using more precise collocations related to data reporting and ensure that your vocabulary is used in a way that sounds natural and accurate for an academic report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'the korea is had least amount', 'the production of the china', and 'no one rank'. Punctuation errors, such as the unnecessary apostrophe in 'killo-watt hour's', also occur. While you attempt to use complex sentences, the frequency of errors in basic grammar and subject-verb agreement prevents a higher score. Focus on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy and ensuring that articles and prepositions are used correctly.

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