Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-09
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given representation demonstrates the consumption and production of electricity in top ten countries during year 2014.
To begin, the highest amountof electricity is produced and consumed by China at 5398 and 5322 billion kWh, respectively. Followed by United States at 4099 billion kWh produced and 3866 billion kWh consumed. Moreover, Russia produced 1057 billion kWh electricity and consumed 1038 billion kWh electricity. Whereas, 936.2 billion kWh was produced and 856.7 was consumed by Japan.
Moving further, India and Canada at 871, 618.9 billion kWh produced and 698.8, 499.9 consumed, respectively. Furthermore, France produced 561.2 billion kWh and consumed 462.9 billion kWh. Moreover, Brazil produced 530.7 billion kWh and consumed 455.8 billion kWh.
Finally, Germany produced 526.6 billion kWh and Korea, Rep. produced 485.1 billion kWh, whereas they both consumed 582.5 billion kWh and 449.5 billion kWh, respectively.
Overall, the highest amountof energy is produced by China and the least amount of energy is produced by Korea, Rep.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the top ten countries and providing data for both production and consumption. The main features are highlighted, such as China's leading position. However, the report is essentially a list of data points rather than a synthesis of information. To reach a higher band, you should group countries by trends (e.g., those that produce more than they consume versus those that consume more than they produce) rather than listing them individually. The overview is also quite basic; it could be improved by noting the general correlation between production and consumption across the top ten nations.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The response is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear progression from the highest producers to the lower ones. Cohesive devices such as 'To begin', 'Moving further', and 'Overall' are used to guide the reader. However, the internal structure of the paragraphs is somewhat mechanical, relying heavily on listing figures. The use of referencing is occasionally awkward, such as in the final paragraph where the sentence structure becomes slightly confusing when trying to compare Germany and Korea. Improving the flow between sentences would enhance the overall coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task, but it is repetitive. You frequently use 'produced' and 'consumed' to describe the data. While these are accurate, using synonyms or alternative phrasing would demonstrate a wider range. There are minor errors, such as 'amountof' (missing a space) and the phrasing 'during year 2014', which should be 'during the year 2014' or simply 'in 2014'. The use of 'representation' is slightly unnatural in this context; 'bar chart' or 'data' would be more precise.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical slips, such as 'Followed by United States' (missing the article 'the') and '856.7 was consumed by Japan' (where the subject-verb agreement is technically correct but the sentence structure is clunky). The sentence 'India and Canada at 871, 618.9 billion kWh produced' is a fragment as it lacks a main verb. While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more careful proofreading and a greater variety of error-free complex structures.
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