Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given illustration depicts the information of top ten countries for the production and usage of electricity in year 2014.
It can be cleary seen from the diagram that maximum amount of electricity is produced in china noted at 5,398 comparing to least korea noted at 485.1 Similarly united states holds second position for producing huge amount of electricity at 4,099. Moreover, countries like Russia,Japan and India produce with small difference noted at 1,057;936.2 and 871. Adding to this, canada is noted at 618.9.
Apart from this, maximum consumption of source is consume by china and united states noted at 5,398 and 4,099. Whereas, minimum usage of electricity is consume by pupil of korea noted at 449.5 however, other countries like germany ,brazil and france are noted at 582.5, 455.8,462.9.
Overall, the graph represents usage and production of countries. China produce more electricity than others.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the score. While you have identified the main features of the chart, the analysis is somewhat superficial. You have listed data points without effectively synthesizing the information or highlighting significant trends or contrasts beyond simple comparisons. The overview is also quite brief and lacks a clear summary of the overall relationship between production and consumption. To improve, ensure you provide a more comprehensive overview and extend your analysis by grouping countries or identifying broader patterns rather than just listing individual figures.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organized into paragraphs, but the flow between sentences is often mechanical. You use some cohesive devices like 'Moreover' and 'Apart from this,' but they are sometimes used incorrectly or do not logically connect the ideas. For instance, the transition between production and consumption is abrupt. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as when you refer to 'maximum consumption of source.' To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus. Improving the logical progression between sentences will help the reader follow your analysis more easily.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive. You frequently use the word 'noted' and 'produce/consumption' without much variation. There are also some awkward word choices, such as 'usage of source' and 'consume by pupil of korea,' which are not appropriate for an academic report. The spelling of country names like 'china,' 'united states,' and 'canada' should always be capitalized. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise academic vocabulary related to data description, such as 'accounted for,' 'surpassed,' 'a significant proportion,' or 'the figures for.'
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains several grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'China produce' instead of 'produces,' and inconsistent punctuation, particularly with the use of semicolons and commas in lists (e.g., '1,057;936.2 and 871'). Sentence structures are generally simple, and there is a lack of complex sentence forms. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and punctuation rules. Additionally, try to incorporate more complex sentence structures, such as using relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions, to demonstrate a wider grammatical range.
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