Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar chart illustrates the top countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Unit measured in Kilowatt .

overall , china dominate the consumption and production of electricity in that period . While United States remained in the second rank ,whereas the rest of the countries going down in rank immediatly from Russia , Japan, India ,Canada , France , Brazil , Germany to the lowest ones which is Korea , Rep.

China took the first rank with 5,398 in production furthermore 5,322 consumable energies . moreover United States about 4,099 production and 3,866 utilized electricity , these are the top 2 countries with the highest measure .Russia have slight proportion between production and consumption 1,057 , 1,038 . In Japan create 936.2 electricity while it consume 856.7 from it . India produce 871 compared with 698.8 consumption .In addition , Canada create 618.9 compared to consumption which is 499.9 .

France and Brazil have low proportion between 561.2 and 530.7 production , while they consume between 462.9 and 455.8 . In contrast German consume more and it product

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response covers the main features of the chart, identifying the top countries and comparing production and consumption. However, the report is incomplete; the final sentence is cut off mid-thought ('In contrast German consume more and it product'), and the data for Germany and Korea is not fully presented. While the overview identifies China and the US as leaders, the lack of a complete conclusion and the omission of specific data points for the final countries prevent a higher score. To improve, ensure all data points mentioned in the prompt are addressed and that sentences are fully completed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow is hindered by mechanical and sometimes confusing transitions. Phrases like 'whereas the rest of the countries going down in rank immediatly' are awkward and impede the logical progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often applied incorrectly or repetitively (e.g., 'furthermore', 'moreover', 'in addition'). The paragraphing is present, but the abrupt ending of the final paragraph significantly disrupts the overall coherence of the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and variety. There are several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'consumable energies' instead of 'electricity consumption' and 'utilized electricity' instead of 'consumed electricity'. The student also struggles with word forms, using 'product' as a verb instead of 'produce'. While the meaning is generally clear, the range is limited, and the errors in collocation and word choice are noticeable throughout the text.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but grammatical control is inconsistent. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'China dominate', 'Russia have', 'it consume') and article usage. Punctuation is also problematic, with inconsistent spacing around commas and periods. The incomplete final sentence is a major grammatical failure. While the meaning is usually understandable, the frequency of these errors requires the reader to work harder to interpret the intended message.

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