Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The bar graph illustrates the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Overall, it is evident from the diagram that china produced the me and consumed the highest amount of electricity followed by the United states. However, Korea produced and consumed the smallest amount of electricity.

First and foremost, China produced 5,398 kWh units of electricity. While, United states produced 4,099 kWh units. Russia and Japan produced 1,057 kwh and 936.2 kwh. While, India and canada had a production rate of 871 kwh and 618.9 kwh respectively. Moreover, France and Brazil produced 561.2 kwh and 530.7 kwh. In addition, Germany and Republic of Korea had a production of 526.6 kWh and 485.1 kwh. According to these given figures china has the highest production of electricity.

On the other hand, in terms of consumption rate, China ranked 1st with a consumption of 5,322 billion kwh. Followed by the United States where the consumption rate is 3,866 billion kwh. In addition, Russia and Japan have a consumption of 1,038 billion kwh and 856.7 kwh. While, India and canada consume 698.8 billion kwh and 499.9 kwh units of electricity. Followed by Brazil and France & Brazil which have a consumption of 462.9 billion kwh and 455.8 billion kwh respectively. However, the consumption of electricity in Germany is more than it's production at 582.5 billion kwh. Whereas, korea consumes 449.5 billion kwh units of electricity.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the top ten countries for both production and consumption. You successfully highlight the main features, such as China's dominance and the Republic of Korea's lower figures. However, the report is largely a list of data points rather than a comparative analysis. To reach a higher band, you should group countries more effectively and focus on the relationship between production and consumption (e.g., noting that Germany consumes more than it produces). The inclusion of 'billion kwh' in the second paragraph is a positive detail, but ensure consistency in units throughout the text.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is logically organized into an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a clear overview. You use basic cohesive devices like 'First and foremost', 'Moreover', and 'On the other hand' to transition between ideas. However, the progression within paragraphs is somewhat mechanical, relying heavily on listing figures rather than synthesizing information. Referencing is occasionally unclear, such as the phrase 'France & Brazil' appearing in the consumption paragraph, which creates confusion. Improving the flow between sentences by using more varied linking phrases would enhance the overall coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'illustrates', 'consumption rate', and 'production'. However, there are several errors in capitalization (e.g., 'china', 'United states', 'korea') and inconsistent unit labeling. Some phrasing is repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'produced... units of electricity' and 'consumption of... billion kwh'. To improve, try to vary your verbs and nouns, and ensure that proper nouns are consistently capitalized to maintain a professional academic tone.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with articles ('the United states') and punctuation. You have issues with sentence fragments, such as 'While, United states produced 4,099 kWh units', where the introductory clause is incorrectly punctuated. Additionally, there are errors in subject-verb agreement and possessive forms, such as 'it's production' instead of 'its production'. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to limit your score in this criterion.

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