Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The productions and usage of electricity of the top ten countries is illustrates by provided bar graph in 2014.The data in the figures are given in billions kwh form.
Overall,china dominate the all nine countries in both production and consumption of electricity whereas the korea republic has been seen in dramatically lower list in both production and consumption factors.
In production, China produces the highest amount of electricity in 2014 account with 5398 billion kwh followed by united states holds a scend place producing 4099 billions kwh electricity in a year. Russia ,Japan and India produced almost same level of electricity accounted with 1057,936,871 billions kwhrespectively. Whereas the production level on other 5 country{Canada ,France ,Brazil ,Germany and Korea.republic } seems relatively low with 618.9,51.2,530.7,526.6,485.1 billions kwh respectively.
in consumption ,in the consumptions level in here also China consume a largest number of electricity among comapre to other countries the consumption of electricity by china is 5322 billion kwh .united stated followed by the consumption of electricity is 3866 billions of kwh .whereas Russia and Japan use electricity in low amont with 1038 and 85.7 billion kwh .India consume only 200 billions kwh of ekectricity from it's production .canada ,France and brazil use 100 billions kwh of electricity from their production.whereaqs germany kora xonsume least
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student successfully identifies the main features of the provided bar chart, noting the top ten countries for electricity production and consumption in 2014. Key highlights, such as China dominating both categories and the Republic of Korea ranking near the bottom, are accurately captured. While the student attempts to report data for various countries, there are numerous statistical inaccuracies and misreadings of the figures in the text (e.g., stating Japan's consumption is 85.7 billion kwh instead of a production figure, and confusing various decimal points). Despite these data reporting errors, all parts of the task are addressed, and an overview is provided. This performance aligns best with Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organized into distinct paragraphs, starting with an introduction, moving to an overview, and then splitting production and consumption details. However, the overall progression lacks smooth logical flow due to abrupt transitions and fragmented sentences. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or repetitively (e.g., 'whereas', 'in consumption ,in the consumptions level in here also'). Referencing and punctuation errors further disrupt the flow. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion is faulty. This sits comfortably within the Band 5.0 descriptor range.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student demonstrates a limited but minimally adequate range of vocabulary suitable for describing data, using words such as 'production', 'consumption', 'dominate', and 'highest amount'. However, there are frequent word-formation errors and spelling mistakes, such as 'productions', 'illustrates', 'billions kwh form', 'comapre', and 'ekectricity'. Less common vocabulary is attempted but often inaccurate in collocation or form. The lexical control causes noticeable difficulty for the reader at times, placing this response securely at Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control is weak. There are frequent grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('china dominate', 'the korea republic has been seen'), missing articles, incorrect prepositions, and pervasive punctuation mistakes (e.g., unspaced commas and periods, stray brackets). Complex structures are frequently faulty. These frequent errors cause difficulty for the reader and reflect the Band 5.0 descriptors.
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