Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar graph illustrates the top ten nations for the manufacture and uses of electricity over the year 2014.

overall, the bar chart represents the China had higgest production as well as consumption of the electricity, on the contrary, Korea had lowest manufacture and uses of electricity. Moreover, only Germany had more uses of electricity rather than manufacture.

Getting back to the graph, China had about 5398kwh of manufacture and approximately 5322kwh of the uses of the electricity. In contrast, similar pattern observed in US It had at 4099kwh of the construction and just over 3866kwh of the consumption. However, Russia had just over 1057kwh manufacture and at 1038kwh uses of electricity. there were no measure differences between production as well as uses.

In contrast, Japan and India both were same pattern observed.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response attempts to summarize the main features of the chart, noting that China had the highest production and consumption while Korea had the lowest. However, the response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, containing only 133 words. This under-length impacts the overall development and completeness of the task. While some key comparisons are made, the data points are sparse, and the overall summary remains under-developed, leading to a penalty under Task Achievement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The text is organized into short paragraphs, attempting an overview and body details, but the logical progression is weak and fractured. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or repetitively (e.g., 'overall,', 'Getting back to the graph,', 'In contrast,'). Paragraphing is disjointed, with incomplete thoughts at the end of the response, such as 'In contrast, Japan and India both were same pattern observed,' which lacks completion and clarity.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, relying heavily on words like 'manufacture', 'uses', and 'electricity'. There are notable word choice and collocation issues, such as 'uses of the electricity', 'construction' used instead of production, and 'measure differences' instead of measurable or major differences. The range of vocabulary is limited and inadequate for a higher band score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The text contains numerous grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'represents the China had higgest production', 'Korea had lowest manufacture', and 'both were same pattern observed'. Sentence structures are predominantly simple or faulty when attempting complexity, and there are frequent punctuation and capitalization errors (e.g., lowercase 'overall,' and 'china'). These errors cause some difficulty for the reader.

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