Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The bar graph illustrate about the ten top countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

The electricity was in 2014 mostly average production because the people can use less electricity to pay the electricity bill now the government was gives free supply electricity.

To Begin with rank of countries top ten China and United states has rise in electricity, Russia, Japan and India was average production and consumption 871 to 1,057 people used however the remaining five countries are some drop Canada, France, Brazil, Germany and Korea ,Rep are 485.1 to 618.9 people are used electric consumption and production.

The Production was in billion KWH, Consumption was in billion kWh, these are major ten top countries in the world ranked to product and consumption of electricity in the period of 2014, it was increasing population from 526.6 to 5,398 not only but also China was one thousand population more than United States.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to summarise the bar chart by identifying the top countries for electricity production and consumption. However, the student struggles significantly with accurately reporting the main features and data points. For instance, the statement that 'China and United states has rise in electricity' lacks specific figures, and the numbers quoted ('871 to 1,057 people used') confuse populations with billion kWh units. The overview is largely absent or inaccurate, and the description of data trends is severely underdeveloped and confusingly phrased. This corresponds to Band 4.0, as the response touches upon the topic but fails to accurately present the key data or make coherent comparisons.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text is divided into short paragraphs, but the overall organisation lacks a logical progression. Transitions like 'To Begin with' are used mechanically, and the sentences within paragraphs do not flow logically from one to the next. Referencing is extremely unclear, as seen in phrases like 'these are major ten top countries in the world ranked to product and consumption', which create severe confusion for the reader. There is a complete lack of effective cohesive devices to guide the reader through the data. This level of organisation and referencing firmly places the response at Band 4.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and frequently inappropriate for an academic task. Examples include writing 'graph illustrate about' instead of 'graph illustrates', and confusing fundamental terms such as 'people used' instead of consumption in billion kWh. Word choices are heavily strained, and errors in collocation and phrasing impede understanding throughout the text. Although the student attempts to use topic-related vocabulary like 'production', 'consumption', and 'countries', the misuse of these terms restricts the lexical score to Band 4.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response exhibits a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple, poorly constructed sentences. There are frequent, heavy grammatical errors that distort meaning, such as 'The bar graph illustrate about', 'the government was gives free supply electricity', and run-on sentences like 'not only but also China was one thousand population more than United States.' Punctuation and verb tense agreement are unreliable throughout the text. Because errors are frequent and consistently cause difficulty for the reader, this performance meets the criteria for Band 4.0.

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