Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The bar graph illustrates the manufacturing and expenditure of top ten nations.

Overall,the consumption and production of China and US is far ahead from remaining states.However,different countries also have good amount of creation of electricity and slightly same amount of utilization.

In 2014,China rank as number one as because of it produces 5398 billion kwh and there consumption is also same like of production little bit of difference as of 1038 billion kwh.In addition,US has also good amount of production as about 4099 billion kwh and use is around 3866 billion kwh.Consequently, these two republics have huge ratio among given states.Russia and Japan have not too much of production and consumption but they have certain amount like in Russia it produces 1057 kwh.Nevertheless its production is 1038 kwh.Japan making 936.2 kwh in a year and its consumption is around 856.7 billion kwh.India,Canada,France and Republic of South Korea have produce also certain amount of production and consumption.The production and consumption is almost simillar they cannot be export to other states.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The student attempts to address the task by summarizing the main features of the bar graph, such as highlighting China and the US as the leading countries in electricity production and consumption. However, the response suffers from significant limitations. The data reporting is inaccurate in places, such as the statement regarding China where the student mentions a difference of '1038 billion kwh' which misinterprets the chart's figures. Furthermore, the units and numbers are frequently imprecise or confused (e.g., writing '1057 kwh' instead of billion kWh). While the overview mentions top nations, key comparisons between countries are vague ('different countries also have good amount of creation'). Consequently, this performance aligns with Band 5, as the response addresses the task only partially with under-developed and sometimes inaccurate data representation.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is organized into a single, dense block of text with only two paragraphs, and the overall progression is difficult to follow. Cohesive devices are either missing, inadequate, or used inappropriately (e.g., 'Consequently, these two republics have huge ratio', 'Nevertheless its production is...'). Referencing is also faulty in places, making it hard to track whether the writer is referring to production or consumption figures. There is a lack of clear paragraphing to separate the overview from the detailed body points. Because of these structural and cohesive flaws, the text fits the Band 5 descriptor where there is some organization but no clear overall progression, and cohesive devices are inadequate or inaccurate.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The lexical range is limited and repetitive. The student frequently reuses basic terms such as 'production', 'consumption', 'amount', and 'electricity'. There are several unnatural word choices and collocations, such as 'manufacturing and expenditure' instead of 'production and consumption', 'good amount of creation', and calling countries 'republics'. Spelling is generally okay, but word choice errors are noticeable and sometimes cause confusion for the reader. This vocabulary profile sits comfortably at Band 5, showing a limited and minimally adequate range with noticeable errors in word choice and collocation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentences, but grammatical control is weak. There are frequent errors in verb forms, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions, such as 'China rank as number one as because of it produces', 'there consumption is also same', and 'Japan making 936.2 kwh'. Punctuation is also problematic, with missing spaces after commas (e.g., 'Overall,the') and incomplete sentence structures ('The production and consumption is almost simillar they cannot be export to other states'). These frequent errors and faulty complex structures cause some difficulty for the reader, matching the Band 5 descriptor.

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