Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The following bar chart illustrates the information about the top 10 producer and the consumer countries for electricity in year 2014.

overall it is visible that not a very big gap in electricity generated and electricity consumed by a country. Thou there is a huge difference in how much electricity generated and used for between many countries.

Firstly, we have chahina china at the top with 5,398 (billion KWh) energy produced in year 2014 and nearly consumed all of the energy produced with a little left to spare. On the second plac we have united states with production and consuy number being 4,099 (billion KWh) and 3,866 (billion KWh) respectively. One furthermore we have Russia on number third with just 1,057 electricity prod and almot all being consumed in year 2014, follow Russia on number fourth we have Japan with alme a littlesame billion (KWh) energy produced by russic with 936.2 billion Kwh

Further down we have india on firth posi with 871 billion (KWh) energy produced and neraly 7 billion (KWh) bing used in 2014. Just below indic in enery production ratig, we have canacla, france, Brazil and Germany with enery production rakgity betwen [redacted phone] billion kWh in year 2014. On the last number we have kore with just 485.1 billion kWh of enery produced and fx only 449.5 blly consumed by it in year 2014.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The student attempts to address the task by reporting information from the bar chart regarding electricity production and consumption in 2014. However, the response falls short of fully satisfying the requirements for a higher band due to numerous inaccuracies in data reporting, missing key comparisons, and poor overall organisation. For instance, the student states that India used 'nearly 7 billion (KWh)' in 2014, whereas the chart clearly shows consumption at nearly 698.8 billion kWh, representing a massive misreading of the data. Furthermore, while the top countries like China and the United States are mentioned, the lack of a clear, coherent overview and the presence of severe data distortions mean the response only partially addresses the prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks clear logical organisation and progression. The response begins with a fragmented introduction and an uncapitalised transition into the body paragraphs ("overall it is visible..."). Paragraphing is poorly controlled, with dense, rambling sentences that merge multiple ideas together without clear signposting or logical sequencing. Cohesive devices are either missing, misused, or confused (e.g., using 'Thou' incorrectly or repeating 'we have' excessively). Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of information across the text. Overall cohesion is faulty and mechanical.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The lexical resource displayed is severely limited and contains an extremely high frequency of spelling errors and typographical mistakes throughout the text (e.g., 'chahina', 'china', 'plac', 'consuy', 'prod', 'almot', 'alme', 'firth', 'posi', 'bing', 'indic', 'enery', 'ratig', 'canacla', 'rakgity', 'kore', 'blly'). The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, heavily relying on informal conversational phrases ('we have', 'with a little left to spare') rather than precise academic register. These pervasive errors and the lack of a flexible lexical range significantly impede communication and strain the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of poorly constructed simple sentences and failed attempts at complex structures. There are persistent, fundamental errors in sentence structure, punctuation, subject-verb agreement, and missing verbs (e.g., 'not a very big gap in electricity generated...', 'how much electricity generated and used for between many countries'). Punctuation is largely neglected, with missing capitalisation at the beginning of sentences and proper nouns. The frequency of grammatical errors distorts meaning and causes severe difficulty for the reader throughout the response.

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