Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given bar chart illustrates the best ten nations which had produced and utilised electricity in the year 2014. With this, it can be noticed that production and consumption are measured in kilowatts.
Overall, it can be observed that china had the most production and consumption of electricity while Republic of Korea had the least in the top 10 countries.
To begin with, China is the highest manufactrurer and usage of electricity with the mass production of 5,398billion and used 5,322 billion in kWh, while United States was the second highest with 4,099 billion KWH and 3,866 respectively. Moreover,the Korea. Rep.had the lowest numbers of production among the whole countries which had made 485.1 billion KWH of power and used 449.5 billion kWh.
Additionaly, Russia and Japan held the third and the fourth positions with the manufacturing of electricity with1,057 and 936.2 billion kWh respectively also the utilization of 1, 038 and 856.7 billion kWh respectively. Furthermore Canada was the sixth which assembled 618.9 and used 499.9 billion kWh.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The student successfully identifies the main features of the chart, noting the highest (China) and lowest (Republic of Korea) rankings for electricity production and consumption in 2014, along with figures for several other major countries like the United States, Russia, Japan, and Canada. An overview is present in the second paragraph, capturing the broader pattern. However, there are minor inaccuracies in reporting data, such as omitting the unit scale 'billion kWh' in places (e.g., '5,398billion') and misidentifying the sixth country (Canada is actually sixth, but the student states 'Canada was the sixth which assembled...'). Overall, all parts of the prompt are addressed adequately, placing this response securely in Band 6.5 to 7.0 range. We award a Band 6.0 as some ideas are slightly under-developed and minor data reporting errors occur.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is organized into logical paragraphs, beginning with an introduction, followed by an overview, and then detailed body paragraphs. Cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'To begin with', 'Moreover', and 'Additionally' are employed to guide the reader through the data. However, referencing is at times clumsy or mechanical (e.g., 'With this, it can be noticed...', 'among the whole countries'). Paragraphing is sufficient, but logical progression falters slightly when transitioning between countries without a completely seamless flow. The cohesive structure fits the Band 6 descriptor well, showing an adequate overall arrangement with some mechanical usage.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The student attempts a range of vocabulary suitable for an Academic Task 1 response, using words such as 'illustrates', 'production', 'consumption', 'utilised', and 'manufacturer'. However, there are notable word choice and collocation errors, such as 'best ten nations' instead of 'top ten countries', 'manufactrurer and usage of electricity with the mass production' (awkward collocation), and 'assembled' instead of produced or generated in reference to Canada's electricity. Spelling errors are also present, such as 'manufactrurer' and 'Additionaly'. These lexical slips limit the score to Band 5.5 or 6.0, as the vocabulary is adequate for the task but contains noticeable inaccuracies.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as relative clauses ('countries which had made...') and participial phrases. However, grammatical accuracy is inconsistent. There are several tense and verb form errors, such as 'had produced and utilised' instead of simple past or present, 'china had the most production' (capitalization error), and 'the Korea. Rep.had the lowest numbers' (punctuation and spacing errors). Preposition and article errors also occur (e.g., 'among the whole countries'). While meaning is generally clear despite these errors, the frequency of basic grammatical and punctuation inaccuracies keeps the score at a Band 5.5.
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