Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
THE PICTORIAL REPRESENTATION SHOWS THE DATA RELATED TO PRODUCTION AND CONSUMPTION OF ELECTRICITY IN TEN COUNTRIES IN THE YEAR 2014.
OVERALL, CHINA OVERPASSED OTHER COUNTRIES IN BOTH PRODUCTION AS WELL AS CONSUMPTION WHILE KOREA REMAINED AT THE LOWEST AMONG ALL THE NATIONS.
FROM THE GIVEN DATA, IT IS CLEAR COUNTRIES ARE ARRANGED IN THE HIGHEST TO LOWEST RANKING ORDER OF ELECTRICITY PRODUCTION AND CONSUMPTION. CHINA HAS HIGHEST PRODUCTION AS WELL AS CONSUMPTION THAT IS 5398 KwH AND 5322 KwH RESPECTIVELY. FOLLOWED BY TOP FOUR COUNTRIES LIKE UK, JAPAN ,RUSSIA AND INDIA .ALL THESE NATIONS HAVE PRODUCTION AND CONSUMPTION VALUES ARE NEAR 1000KwH.THEN , THE COUNTRIES THAT HAVE MINIMUM AMOUNT OF PRODUCTION AND USAGE ARE CANADA, FRANCE, BRAZIL, GERMANY AND KOREA.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The student has attempted to summarize the main features of the chart, correctly identifying China as the leading producer and consumer and Korea as the lowest among the top ten. However, there are significant data inaccuracies. For instance, the student states that the top four countries include 'UK, Japan, Russia and India'—the UK does not appear in the chart, and the United States is missing from this list despite being second. Furthermore, the response falls significantly short of the 150-word minimum, containing only 120 words. This under-length impacts the overall fullness of the response and leads to a lowered score in this criterion.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text is presented in ALL CAPS, which is inappropriate for an IELTS response. The organization is basic, featuring an introductory sentence, an overview paragraph, and a body paragraph. Cohesive devices are minimal and sometimes awkward, such as starting a sentence with 'THEN , THE COUNTRIES THAT HAVE...'. The referencing between sentences is weak, particularly in the reporting of the ranked data where grouping is inaccurate (e.g., placing India near 1000 kWh when it is around 870/698 kWh). Paragraphing is attempted, but the logical progression breaks down due to hasty clustering of data.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive ('PRODUCTION', 'CONSUMPTION', 'COUNTRIES'). There are lexical inaccuracies, such as 'OVERPASSED' instead of 'surpassed' or 'outperformed'. The student attempts some less common vocabulary ('PICTORIAL REPRESENTATION', 'RANKING ORDER'), but overall range is limited. Spelling is generally acceptable, but the lack of precise vocabulary for describing numerical data restricts the lexical score to a band 5.5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response features a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control is inconsistent. There are several grammatical errors and awkward phrasings, such as 'IT IS CLEAR COUNTRIES ARE ARRANGED' (missing 'that') and 'ALL THESE NATIONS HAVE PRODUCTION AND CONSUMPTION VALUES ARE NEAR' (double verb structure). Punctuation is also affected by erratic spacing around commas. While basic meaning is usually clear, frequent minor errors prevent the response from achieving a higher band.
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