Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chart illustrate information about electricity production and consumption in 2024 in the top ten countries. The figure given in billion kWh.
Overall, China and United States produced and consumed more than the other countries.In most countries, production was higer than consumption. Howewer, Germany less produced electricity compare to their consumed.
China ecelctiry production was 5398 billion kWh and consumption was 5322 billion kWh. United stated produced 4099 billion kWh compare to consumed is 3866 billion kWh.While,Russia produced electricity arround1057 billion kWh, and used 1038 billion kWh.
Electricity production was 936.2 billion kWh by Japan and consumed 856.7 billion kWh. In India, produced arround 871 billion kWh and used is 698.8 billion kWh.Canada's production was 618.9 billion kWh compare to their consumption was 499.9 billion kWh.
In France , produced electricity 561.2 billion kWh and used 462.9 billion kWh.Brazil production was 530.7 and consumed 455.8 billion kWh. Germany lless production compare to consumption, produced 526.6 kwh and consumed 582.5 billion kwh. Korea produced 485.1 billion kwh and consumed449.5 kw
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The student covers all parts of the task by reporting the main features of electricity production and consumption across the top ten countries in 2014. An overview is successfully provided, noting that China and the United States led significantly, that production generally exceeded consumption, and highlighting the exception of Germany. Specific data points are cited correctly, such as China's figures of 5,398 billion kWh and 5,322 billion kWh. However, there are minor inaccuracies in the transcription of the year (writing 2024 instead of 2014) and occasional slight data misreadings, such as stating Germany's production as '526.6 kwh' without units. Nevertheless, the response presents a clear and relevant overview with adequate supporting data, aligning well with the Band 6 descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is arranged coherently, with a logical overall progression from an introductory paragraph and an overview to detailed body paragraphs. Paragraphing is used adequately to group information country by country or in logical clusters. However, cohesive devices are sometimes faulty, mechanical, or omitted entirely, leading to abrupt transitions between sentences (e.g., 'While,Russia produced...', 'In India, produced arround...'). Referencing is occasionally unclear, and punctuation errors around conjunctions and introductory phrases disrupt the flow. While the overall arrangement is coherent, the frequent mechanical flaws in cohesion place this response firmly in the Band 5.5 to 6.0 range, warranting a 5.5.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully using terms such as 'production', 'consumption', 'billion kWh', and country names. However, there are notable limitations and frequent errors in word choice, form, and collocation, such as 'higer' instead of higher, 'less produced electricity compare to their consumed', and 'ecelctiry'. Less common vocabulary is attempted with noticeable inaccuracy ('consumed compare to consumed is'). Spelling errors ('arround', 'ecelctiry', 'lless') and awkward phrasing occasionally impede communication. This matches the Band 5 descriptors, where vocabulary is minimally adequate but marred by noticeable errors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, utilizing comparative structures and dependent clauses (e.g., 'While, Russia produced electricity...'). However, grammatical accuracy is weak, featuring frequent errors in verb forms, voice, and missing prepositions (e.g., 'The bar chart illustrate', 'consumed compare to consumption', 'used is 698.8 billion kWh', and incomplete sentences like 'consumed449.5 kw'). Punctuation and spacing errors are also prevalent throughout the text. Although the meaning can generally be deciphered, the frequency of errors places the grammar control below Band 6, fitting the Band 5 descriptor where frequent errors in complex structures cause some difficulty.
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