Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar graph illustrates the top ten nations for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Overall, it can be seen that the production and usage of electricity in china was highest. korea represented least production and consumption.
To begin with, in China, the production of electricity accounted for, 5,398 billion kWh and consumption of electricity represented 5,322. United states was second largest producer and consumer of electricity 4,099 and 3,866 billionkWh, respectively. Russia was producing 1,057 billion kWh electricity. Moreover, in Russia 3,866 billion kWh were consumed. However, there were 936.2 billion kWh electricity were produced in japan and 856.7
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, stopping abruptly at 102 words and trailing off mid-sentence. While the student successfully identifies the overall trend and top/bottom countries ('china was highest', 'korea represented least production'), the incomplete nature of the response means that key features and comparisons for several countries are missing. According to the task achievement descriptors, failing to complete the task severely limits the development of ideas. Therefore, a band score of 4.0 is appropriate due to the incomplete response and under-developed overview.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text is organized into brief paragraphs, starting with an introduction and an overall overview. However, the progression is cut short due to the incomplete writing. Cohesive devices are minimal, and referencing is sometimes faulty, such as confusing the consumption figures for Russia ('Moreover, in Russia 3,866 billion kWh were consumed', whereas Russia's consumption was actually 1,038 billion kWh according to the visual data). Paragraphing is attempted, but overall cohesion suffers from the abrupt ending and lack of logical development. This aligns with a band score of 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive ('production and consumption', 'producer and consumer'). There are also noticeable lexical errors and inaccurate data reporting, such as attributing the U.S. consumption figure of 3,866 to Russia. Capitalization errors are present throughout ('china', 'korea', 'United states', 'japan'). While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey basic concepts of data reporting, the range is limited and contains errors that cause confusion for the reader. This corresponds to a band score of 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student attempts some complex structures, but grammatical accuracy is weak. Errors include missing articles ('production of electricity accounted for, 5,398 billion kWh and consumption of electricity represented 5,322'), incorrect prepositions, and awkward phrasing ('Russia was producing 1,057 billion kWh electricity'). Punctuation is also problematic, notably the unnecessary comma splice ('accounted for, 5,398'). Because the response ends mid-sentence ('and 856.7'), the grammatical range is severely restricted. These frequent errors and limitations place the response at a band score of 5.0.
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