Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart compares the production and consumption of electricity y ten countries in the period of 2014.

overall, the chaina was on top level which production and was higher than other countries. the unoted states production was higher the consumption . the korea, rep was least productive and it was also lwer on consumption also. firstly, the greatest productive countries are china and united state which were accounted for 5,398 and 4099 rspectively chin was on higher level compared to united sate.consumpiton of china madeup for 5322 while united state was 3866. the china both consumption and prbuction were similar but china producation was more tha consumption. the production of russi was about 1057 and consumption aws 1038 these both were on similar range.japan production was high than consumption and recorded for 1057 and 1038 respectively. india produce more amount of electricity and consume small amount consume it recorded for 871 and 698.8.

furthermore, canada production was high tha consumption so it aws accounted for 618.9 and 499.9 respectively. others rest of the country do the same more production and less consumption.the france production was 561.2 1nd consupton was 462.9 where production is reltively high. brazil production accounted for 530.7 while consumption was 455.8. the german consumption aws higher than production which accounted for 582.6 and 526.5 relatively. korea, rep produce electric for 485 whereas consumption was 449.5.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The student attempts to address the task by reporting on the top ten countries for electricity production and consumption in 2014. An overview is attempted at the beginning, noting that China was the top producer and consumer, South Korea was the lowest, and the United States produced more than it consumed. However, the response contains numerous inaccurate data transcriptions and confusions; for example, the student claims Japan's production and consumption were 'recorded for 1057 and 1038' (which are actually Russia's figures) and misattributes data for several other nations. Furthermore, the information is presented as a dense, undifferentiated list of figures without a clear analytical structure or well-integrated comparisons, leading to a partial and flawed coverage of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response is poorly organised, lacking proper paragraphing as it is divided into only two massive blocks of text. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, relying on repetitive transitions like 'respectively', 'furthermore', and crude chaining of clauses. There is no clear logical progression or roadmap for the reader; sentences run into one another without adequate punctuation or structural markers, causing significant disruption to the flow of ideas. Paragraphing is not used sufficiently or appropriately to separate distinct trends or groupings of countries.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary range is basic and repetitive, heavily reliant on simple terms like 'production', 'consumption', 'high', and 'low'. There are numerous spelling errors ('chaina', 'unoted', 'lwer', 'russi', 'consupton', 'reltively', 'german') and word-form errors ('greatest productive' instead of 'largest producers', 'produce electric' instead of 'produce electricity'). The student attempts less common vocabulary or technical terms related to the chart data, but frequent inaccuracies in word choice and spelling significantly impede readability and strain the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple and attempted complex sentences that are marred by fundamental structural errors and poor punctuation. There are constant errors in subject-verb agreement, tense consistency, and prepositions, such as in 'china both consumption and prbuction were similar but china producation was more tha consumption' and 'the german consumption aws higher than production which accounted for 582.6 and 526.5 relatively'. Run-on sentences and sentence fragments are frequent, and punctuation is largely neglected, making it difficult to parse clause boundaries reliably.

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