Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The provided bar graph illustrates top ranked nations , in terms of production and consumption of elecricity in a perticuler year 2014 . the unit of messurent is in billion kWh.
Overall, a glance at that data shows that , China ranked one regarding the production and consumption of eletricity .Whereas , Korea ranked least in the data .
By analysing the data , it can be seen that , China generated 5,398 billion kWh of eletricity in 2014 , However , it self , it consumed about 5,322 billion kWh eletricity in that year . After that , US ranked second in the list , where it prodcued 4,099 billion kwh of eletricity and used approximately 3,866 billion kWh in that perticulear year . Followed by russia . whee the numbers drop by 3X . it created 1,057 billion kWh and utillised allmost of it . In terms of Japan , it prodcued about 936.2 kwh and adopted 856.7 kWh .
Furthermore , moving to India and canada , where thet genereated about 871 and 618.9 billion kwh and operated about 698.8 and 499.9 billion kwh of eletricity respetivly . Moreover , the creation and consumption of eletricity in france and Brazil remains allmost same in 2014 . However , Korea , Rep , ranked least in the data , where it generted only 485.1 billion kwh of eletricity and it utillised 449.5 bilions kWh of eletricity .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The student covers all key parts of the task by reporting on the top ten countries for electricity production and consumption in 2014. An overview is provided, stating that China ranked first while Korea ranked last. The main features and figures from the bar chart are generally reported accurately, such as China producing 5,398 billion kWh and consuming 5,322 billion kWh. However, there are some minor inaccuracies in transcription and expression, such as stating Japan produced '936.2 kwh' (omitting 'billion') and stating Russia's numbers 'drop by 3X' which is a slight mischaracterisation of the proportional difference. Despite these minor lapses, the response presents a clear and adequate summary of the data, satisfying the requirements for Band 6.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is arranged into four paragraphs, providing an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs detailing the country statistics. Logical sequencing is present overall, moving from the top countries down to the lower-ranked nations. However, paragraphing is somewhat erratic, with the first two sentences separated and the second paragraph consisting of only two sentences. Cohesive devices are attempted, but mechanical errors and awkward linking phrases are frequent, such as 'By analysing the data , it can be seen that' and punctuation anomalies like spaces before commas. Referencing is mostly clear, but the flow is occasionally disrupted by choppy sentence structures and punctuation errors, placing this response solidly in Band 5.5.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, successfully incorporating topic-specific terms such as 'production', 'consumption', 'generated', and 'billion kWh'. However, there are numerous spelling and word-choice errors throughout the response, including 'elecricity', 'perticuler', 'messurent', 'eletricity', 'prodcued', 'perticulear', 'russia', 'whee', 'utillised', 'allmost', 'thet', 'genereated', 'respetivly', and 'generted'. While the student attempts less common vocabulary, the high density of basic spelling mistakes and typographical errors impedes fluency and restricts the score to Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, incorporating relative clauses and comparative structures. However, grammatical accuracy is weak, with frequent errors in punctuation, capitalization, and verb forms. Examples include 'top ranked nations , in terms of', missing articles or incorrect pronouns ('it self , it consumed'), and awkward phrasing like 'where the numbers drop by 3X'. Punctuation is particularly poor, with systematic spacing errors before commas and periods throughout the text. These errors occasionally cause strain for the reader, though communication remains mostly intact, warranting a Band 5.0.
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