Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar chart illustrates data on the top ten countries that are producing and consuming electricity in 2014.
Overall it can be seen that China stood at the top which produced and consumed a significant amount of electricity, while korea had the least production and consumption.
China and the United States were two top countries that had the highest production with 5,398 billion kWh and 4,099 billion kWh, respectively, whereas the consumption of electricity was 5,322 billion kWh in China and 3,866 billion kWh in the United States. Furthermore, the amount of production and the utilization of electricity were same in Russia to approximately 4,000 billion kWh. Notably, the production of electricity recorded roughly decreased from in a downward order from Canada (, France, Brazil, Germany to Korea.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The student has failed to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, writing only 128 words, which directly impacts the completeness of the response. While the student attempts to summarise the main features, such as identifying China and the United States as top producers, there are significant factual inaccuracies in the data reporting. For instance, the student states that the production and consumption in Russia were 'approximately 4,000 billion kWh', whereas the chart clearly shows figures around 1,000 billion kWh. Furthermore, the final sentence is incomplete and garbled ('recorded roughly decreased from in a downward order from Canada (, France, Brazil, Germany to Korea'). Because of the under-length penalty and severe data misinterpretations, the task achievement is limited.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response has a basic organisational structure with an introduction and a brief overview. However, progression breaks down towards the end of the text. Cohesive devices are attempted, such as 'whereas' and 'furthermore', but referencing and logical flow are compromised by inaccurate data and clumsy phrasing. Paragraphing is attempted, but the final section is incomplete and disjointed, resulting in a lack of overall clarity in progression.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is fairly basic and repetitive, with terms like 'producing', 'consuming', and 'amount'. There are also awkward word choices and collocations, such as 'utilization of electricity' and 'in a downward order'. Spelling is generally adequate, but lexical control is weak, and the student's inability to accurately report numbers affects precision. The range is sufficient for a basic attempt but lacks the flexibility needed for higher bands.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student attempts some complex sentence structures, such as 'China and the United States were two top countries that had the highest production with...', but control is inconsistent. There are noticeable grammatical errors and awkward phrasings, most notably in the final sentence ('recorded roughly decreased from in a downward order...'), which is structurally incomplete and confusing. While simpler sentences are mostly accurate, structural errors impede communication in the second half of the response.
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