Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The bar chart illustration depicts the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014, measured in billion kWh.

Overall, the production and consumption higher of electricity recorded higher in China. Furthermore, the production and consumption of electricity measured lowest in korea,Rep.

In 2014, the production and consumption higher of electricity recorded higher in China. The highest production at 5398 billion kWh. While, the consumption recorded at 5322 billion kWh. Otherwise, the production and consumption higher of electricity recorded higher in United states. The highest production at 5398 billion kWh. While, the consumption recorded at 5322 billion kWh.the production and consumption higher of electricity recorded higher in China. The highest production at 5398 billion kWh. While, the consumption recorded at 5322 billion kWh.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response is significantly under the minimum length requirement of 150 words, containing only 126 words. While the candidate successfully identifies the main chart topic and mentions China and Korea at the beginning, the body paragraphs suffer from severe repetition, copying the exact same sentences and data points multiple times (e.g., 'The highest production at 5398 billion kWh. While, the consumption recorded at 5322 billion kWh'). Furthermore, the second body paragraph mistakenly assigns China's data to the United States. Due to the incomplete length, repetitive phrasing, and factual confusion in data attribution, the task is only partially addressed, leading to a low band score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text lacks clear overall progression due to extreme repetition and missing body paragraph development. While the introduction attempts a basic overview, the body paragraphs fail to logically sequence information, repeating identical phrases about China and the United States multiple times without transitioning to other key countries from the chart. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal structure is chaotic and mechanical, with broken sentences and fragments like 'While, the consumption recorded at 5322 billion kWh.the production...'. Cohesive devices are either misused or absent. This corresponds to Band 4.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive. Words such as 'production', 'consumption', 'electricity', and 'countries' are reused constantly without variation. There are also formatting and capitalization issues, such as 'korea,Rep.' and 'United states'. The student attempts some topic-specific vocabulary related to the chart, but the severe repetition, lack of range, and lexical errors mean that communication is noticeably hindered. This performance aligns with Band 4 descriptors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak. The text contains frequent errors in sentence structure, such as awkward phrasing ('the production and consumption higher of electricity recorded higher'), sentence fragments ('While, the consumption recorded at 5322 billion kWh.'), and punctuation/capitalization mistakes. There is a very limited range of structures, and complex sentences are heavily flawed or avoided entirely through repetitive copying of simple clauses. These persistent errors restrict the score to Band 4.

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