Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart highlights the consumption and production of electricity for top ten countries in 2014.

Given data clearly demonstartes that China has countinously trending in the chart both in consumbation and production of electricity as compared to remaining nine countries.

In production and consumption of electricity: China and United states have slight difference of 5.398 billion kwh and 4.099 billion kwh: 5.322 billion kwh and 3.866 billion kmh.

whereas Rusia ,india and japan has figures of 1.057,87.1 ,936.2 and 1.038,698.8,856.7 billion kmh in production and consumption of electricity.

Meanwhile Canada,Brazil and France has figures of 618.9,530.7,561.2 and 499.9,455.8,462.9 billion kwh in production and consumption of electricity.

However Germany and Korea,Rep has figures of 526.6,485.1 and 582.5,449.5 billion kwh inconsumpution and production of electricity.

The report clearly states that China and United States are considerably remain high in the production and consumption of electricity.whereas Germany and Korea,Rep have last two positions in reference if production and consumption of electricity in year 2014.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The student attempts to report the main features of the chart, noting that China and the United States lead in both electricity production and consumption. However, the response suffers from significant data inaccuracies and a mechanical listing of figures rather than a well-synthesized summary. For instance, the student states 'slight difference of 5.398 billion kwh and 4.099 billion kwh', which misinterprets the numbers as differences rather than total values. Furthermore, numerous figures are mangled or incorrectly transcribed, such as '87.1' instead of 871. While some overall comparisons are attempted, the severe lack of accurate data reporting and the listing format limit the development of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is organised into short, disconnected paragraphs that resemble a list of sentences rather than a cohesive report. There is very little progression of ideas, and the use of cohesive devices is minimal or mechanical (e.g., 'whereas', 'Meanwhile', 'However'). Paragraphing is poorly handled, as single-sentence paragraphs disrupt the natural flow of an academic overview. Referencing between the figures and the countries is sometimes confusing, making it difficult for the reader to track the information smoothly.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is largely repetitive and basic, relying heavily on words directly lifted from the prompt such as 'production', 'consumption', and 'electricity'. There are numerous spelling and word-choice errors, including 'demonstartes', 'countinously', 'consumbation', 'Rusia', 'india', and 'inconsumpution'. The attempt to use less common vocabulary is very limited, and frequent lexical inaccuracies impede smooth reading.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The student attempts some complex sentence structures, but these are frequently faulty. There are persistent grammatical errors, including missing articles ('top ten countries', 'in year 2014'), incorrect verb forms ('Canada,Brazil and France has'), and punctuation errors. Punctuation within numerical lists is misused, leading to run-on structures that make sentences difficult to parse. Error frequency is high throughout the text.

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