Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chart illustrates the consumption and the production of electricity in ten countries in 2014. The statistics measured by billion kWh.
Overall, it is remarkable that China has the highest amount of consumption and production amoung the countries, while the lowest proportion is for Korea Rep.
China marked the high consumption by 5322 billion kWh. The United State ranked on the second place by 3866 billion kWh. Russia is had third figure of consumption by 1038 billion kWh, Japan, India, Canada and France had almost the similar amounts by 856.7, 698.8, 499.9 and 462.9 kWh respectively. Compared with them, Brazil, Germany and Korea Rep had the lowest amount by 455.8, 582.5 and 449.5 kWh respectively.
When talking about the production of electricity, China had the top rank by 5398 kWh. followed by The United States by 4099 kWh. This 2 figure are huge compared with the other countires, Russia, Japan and India had an approximate figures by 1057, 936,2 and 871 kWh respectively. other countries had small amounts by 618.9, 561.2, 530.7, 526.6 and 485.1 kWh for Canada, France, Brazil, Germany and Korea respectively.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The student successfully highlights the main features of the chart, correctly identifying China and the United States as the top producers and consumers of electricity, and noting Korea Rep. as the lowest. An overview is present in the second sentence. However, there are some inaccuracies in reporting the data details, such as omitting the unit 'billion kWh' for several figures (e.g., writing '5322 billion kWh' initially, but later dropping units or writing incorrect formats like '936,2 kWh'). Furthermore, Germany's electricity consumption of 582.5 billion kWh is incorrectly grouped with countries having lower amounts compared to others. While the task is addressed and key comparisons are made, these minor inaccuracies and grouping issues prevent a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response is arranged coherently with a clear introduction, an overview paragraph, and body paragraphs dedicated to consumption and production respectively. Paragraphing is used appropriately. However, cohesion is sometimes faulty or mechanical. Transitions like 'When talking about the production of electricity' are rather conversational. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and sentences are chained together with commas rather than properly controlled cohesive devices or semicolons (e.g., 'Russia is had third figure... Japan, India, Canada and France had almost the similar amounts...'). Overall progression is discernible, but logical connections between ideas could be smoother and more accurately managed.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting words like 'consumption', 'production', 'proportion', and 'rank'. However, there are noticeable lexical and collocational errors throughout, such as 'The statistics measured by billion kWh', 'China marked the high consumption', 'Russia is had third figure', and 'approximate figures'. Word formation and spelling are mostly fine, but inaccuracies in preposition use and word choice indicate a limited and developing lexical range. The vocabulary is sufficient to convey the main message, but lack of precision keeps it at a band 5.5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response includes a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control over grammar is inconsistent. There are several noticeable grammatical errors, such as 'The statistics measured by billion kWh' (passive voice error), 'Russia is had third figure' (tense/verb error), 'This 2 figure are huge' (subject-verb agreement and pluralisation error), and comma splices linking independent clauses. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur with high frequency. Complex structures are attempted but frequently result in faulty grammar, placing this response firmly in the band 5 category.
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