Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar chart illustrates the top ten countries for the generation and uses of electricity in 2014.
overall, china has the highest production and consumption of electricity other hand, korea, rep. has lowest generating and use of electricity and only in germany electricity consumption is more than electricity production.
china has the number first country it produce 5,398 billion khw and consumed 5,322 billion khw and then at second number united states stand with 4,099 billion khw generated and 3,866 billion khw used other side korea, rep generated 485.1 billion kwh and consumed 449.5 billion kwh which is least electricity produced and consumed in all ten country.
germany produced 526.6 billion kwh and consumed 582.5 billion kwh this only one country who consume more electricity then production and other country like russia, japan, india, canada, france and brazil this all country produced electricity between 530 billion kwh to 1,060 billion kwh and consumed between 450 billion kwh to 1,040 billion kwh.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The student covers the main features of the chart, correctly identifying China and the United States as the top producers and consumers, South Korea as the lowest, and Germany as the unique exception where consumption outpaces production. However, there are significant issues with data accuracy and expression. For instance, the phrase 'china has the number first country it produce 5,398 billion khw' contains awkward phrasing and a typo in the unit ('khw' instead of 'kWh'). Furthermore, grouping Russia, Japan, India, Canada, France, and Brazil into a single broad range ('produced electricity between 530 billion kwh to 1,060 billion kwh') is overly simplistic and misses specific key comparisons. While all parts of the task are addressed, the lack of precision and data synthesis keeps this performance at a Band 5.5 level.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text is divided into four paragraphs, attempting an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs for specific data. However, the cohesion is severely impacted by a complete lack of proper punctuation and capitalization (e.g., 'overall, china has... other hand, korea, rep. has...'). Sentences are run together with comma splices or conjunctions like 'other side' and 'and other country like...'. There are no clear cohesive devices guiding the reader smoothly between clauses and sentences. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal logical progression and referencing are weak. This corresponds to a Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student demonstrates a limited range of vocabulary suitable for a data summary. Words like 'production', 'consumption', 'generated', and 'consumed' are used repeatedly. There are noticeable lexical and spelling inaccuracies, such as 'khw' instead of 'kWh', 'uses' instead of 'use' or 'consumption', and 'stand' instead of 'stands'. Less common vocabulary is virtually absent, and the lack of word-formation control (e.g., 'lowest generating and use') restricts the score. The lexical range is minimally adequate for the task, fitting a Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response relies heavily on simple sentences joined by coordinating conjunctions ('and') or run-on structures separated only by commas. There is a severe lack of capitalization at the beginning of sentences and for proper nouns ('china', 'korea, rep.', 'germany'). Grammatical errors are frequent, including subject-verb agreement issues ('it produce', 'united states stand', 'this only one country who consume') and preposition errors ('in all ten country'). Complex sentence structures are either absent or faulty due to punctuation failures. These persistent errors impede smooth reading and place the grammar at a Band 5.0.
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