Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar chart illustrates the top ten countries for the generation and use of electricity in 2014.
Overall, China has the highest production and consumption of electricity other hand, korea, rep. has lowest generating and use of electricity and only in Germany electricity consumption is more than electricity production.
China has the top first country it produced 5,398 billion kwh and consumed 5,322 billion kwh and then at second number United States stand with 4,099 billion kwh generated and 3,866 billion kwh used other side korea, rep. generated 485.1 billion kwh and consumed 449.5 billion kwh which is least electricity produced and consumed in all ten countries.
Germany produced 526.6 billion kwh and consumed 582.5 billion kwh that only one country who consume more electricity then production and other countries like Russia, Japan, India, Canada, France and Brazil this all countries produced electricity between 530 billion kwh to 1,060 billion kwh and consumed between 450 billion kwh to 1,040 billion kwh.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The student successfully covers the main features of the chart, including the top-ranking country (China), the bottom-ranking country (Korea, Rep.), and the notable exception where consumption exceeded production (Germany). Key data points such as the figures for China and the United States are accurately reported. However, the overview is somewhat basic and poorly linked to the rest of the text, and the final paragraph resorts to a sweeping grouping of several countries ('Russia, Japan, India, Canada, France and Brazil this all countries produced electricity between 530 billion kwh to 1,060 billion kwh') rather than highlighting more specific comparative features. Overall, the task is addressed adequately, but the depth of data selection and summarisation places it solidly in the band 6 category.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is organised into four paragraphs, following a logical introduction, overview, and body structure. However, paragraphing and sentence boundaries are poorly managed. For instance, the second paragraph runs multiple independent clauses together with basic conjunctions ('Overall, China has the highest production... other hand, korea, rep. has lowest... and only in Germany...'). Cohesive devices are repetitive and often misused, such as 'other hand' and 'other side', which lack proper prepositional framing. Referencing and progression are sometimes faulty, creating a mechanical feel to the flow of information. Paragraph breaks are also slightly irregular, leading to a score of 5.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is generally adequate to convey the data, employing terms like 'generation', 'consumption', 'produced', and 'consumed'. However, the range is limited and repetitive, with frequent reliance on basic verbs. There are noticeable lexical and spelling inaccuracies, such as lowercase country names ('korea, rep.'), non-standard phrasing ('top first country', 'at second number United States stand'), and confusion between nouns and verbs ('electricity consumption is more than electricity production' versus 'who consume more electricity then production'). These errors cause occasional strain for the reader, fitting the band 5 descriptor.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentences, but grammatical control is weak. There are frequent run-on sentences joined by commas or coordinating conjunctions without proper punctuation, such as 'Germany produced 526.6 billion kwh and consumed 582.5 billion kwh that only one country who consume more electricity then production'. Subject-verb agreement and tense consistency errors are common (e.g., 'United States stand', 'this all countries produced'). Punctuation is largely neglected, with sentences frequently lacking periods or proper capitalisation. These persistent errors restrict the score to band 5.
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