Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chart illustrates the top ten countries for the generation and use of electricity in 2014.
Overall, China has the highest production and consumption of electricity other hand, korea, rep. has lowest generating and use of electricity and only in Germany electricity consumption is more than electricity production.
China has the top first country it produced 5,398 billion kwh and consumed 5,322 billion kwh and then at second number United States stand with 4,099 billion kwh generated and 3,866 billion kwh used other side korea, rep. generated 485.1 billion kwh and consumed 449.5 billion kwh which is least electricity produced and consumed in all ten countries.
Germany produced 526.6 billion kwh and consumed 582.5 billion kwh that only one country who consume more electricity then production and other countries like Russia, Japan, India, Canada, France and Brazil this all countries produced electricity between 530 billion kwh and 1,060 billion kwh and consumed between 450 billion kwh and 1,040 billion kwh.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
The student successfully covers the main features of the chart, identifying the top-producing countries such as China and the United States, the lowest country (Korea, Rep.), and the notable exception of Germany where consumption exceeds production. Figures are correctly cited from the visual data, including specific numbers like 5,398 billion kWh for China's production. An overview is present in the second paragraph, capturing the main extremes and trends. However, the development of some data points is a bit mechanical, and the grouping of Russia, Japan, India, Canada, France, and Brazil into a single broad range lacks finer comparative depth. Overall, the response fulfills the requirements of Task 1 well, earning a band score of 6.5.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response is arranged into four paragraphs, following a logical structure with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs detailing the data. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'Overall,' 'then at second number,' and 'that only one country,' but some transitions are clunky, repetitive, or unidiomatic (e.g., 'other hand,' 'other side'). Paragraphing is sufficient, but within paragraphs, sentences can run together without adequate punctuation or smooth linking, leading to a somewhat fragmented reading experience. Referencing is generally clear, but the overall mechanical cohesion limits the score to a 5.5.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, with terms like 'generation,' 'use,' 'production,' and 'consumption' deployed correctly. However, the range is limited, and the student relies heavily on basic or repetitive phrasing (e.g., repeating 'produced and consumed'). There are noticeable lexical errors and awkward collocations, such as 'top first country,' 'United States stand,' and 'least electricity produced.' These minor inaccuracies do not impede communication, but they restrict the lexical score to a 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control over grammar and punctuation is weak. There are numerous run-on sentences lacking proper punctuation (e.g., the entire second paragraph consists of just two long sentences connected poorly by conjunctions). Errors include missing articles (e.g., 'on other hand'), subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'korea, rep. has lowest'), and awkward phrasing structures. While some simpler sentences are accurate, frequent errors in punctuation and complex structures impact readability, warranting a band score of 5.0.
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