Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The bar chart illustrates the top ten countries for the generation and use of electricity in 2014.

Overall, China has the highest production and consumption of electricity other hand, korea, rep. has lowest generating and use of electricity and only in Germany electricity consumption is more than electricity production.

China has the top first country it produced 5,398 billion kwh and consumed 5,322 billion kwh and then at second number United States stand with 4,099 billion kwh generated and 3,866 billion kwh used other side korea, rep. generated 485.1 billion kwh and consumed 449.5 billion kwh which is least electricity produced and consumed in all ten countries.

Germany produced 526.6 billion kwh and consumed 582.5 billion kwh that only one country who consume more electricity then production and other countries like Russia, Japan, India, Canada, France and Brazil produced electricity between 530 billion kwh and 1,060 billion kwh and consumed between 450 billion kwh and 1,040 billion kwh.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The student successfully addresses all parts of the task by reporting the main features of the chart, specifically highlighting China and the United States as the top producers and consumers, identifying South Korea at the bottom, and noting the unique anomaly of Germany. Key data points are accurately cited, such as China's figures of 5,398 billion kWh for production and 5,322 billion kWh for consumption. An overview is present in the second paragraph, capturing the most striking trends. While some grouping of the middle countries is slightly compressed in the final paragraph, the response meets all core requirements for Task Achievement well, supporting a solid band 6.5.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a clear overall arrangement and follows a logical structure, beginning with an introduction, followed by an overview, and then breaking down the specific data points in subsequent paragraphs. However, cohesive devices are frequently faulty or mechanical, and punctuation issues create run-on sentences, such as 'China has the top first country it produced... and then at second number United States stand...'. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion requires better linking words and punctuation control to secure a higher band.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary suitable for the task, successfully employing terms like 'generation', 'consumption', 'production', and specific numerical units. However, there are noticeable word choice and collocation errors, such as 'other hand, korea, rep. has lowest generating', 'top first country', and 'United States stand'. Furthermore, capitalization of proper nouns like 'korea, rep.' and 'Germany' is inconsistent. These lexical slips restrict the score to a band 5.5.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but it is heavily impacted by run-on sentences and poor punctuation. For instance, the second paragraph is a single long sentence linked by coordinating conjunctions without proper stop punctuation: 'Overall, China has the highest production... and only in Germany electricity consumption is more than electricity production.' Grammatical errors are frequent, including tense and agreement issues like 'United States stand' and 'that only one country who consume'. These errors occasionally cause difficulty for the reader.

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