Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chart illustrates the top ten countries for the generation and use of electricity in 2014.
Overall, China has the highest production and consumption of electricity while,on the other hand, korea, Rep. has lowest generating and use of electricity and only in Germany electricity consumption is more than electricity production.
China has the top first country it produced 5,398 billion kwh and consumed 5,322 billion kwh and then at second number United States stand with 4,099 billion kwh generated and 3,866 billion kwh used other side korea, rep. generated 485.1 billion kwh and consumed 449.5 billion kwh which is least electricity produced and consumed in all ten countries.
Germany produced 526.6 billion kwh and consumed 582.5 billion kwh that only one country who consume more electricity then production and other countries like Russia, Japan, India, Canada, France and Brazil produced electricity between 530 billion kwh and 1,060 billion kwh and consumed between 450 billion kwh and 1,040 billion kwh.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
The student successfully addresses the main parts of the prompt by reporting the top ten countries for electricity production and consumption in 2014. The overview correctly identifies China as the highest and South Korea as the lowest, as well as noting the unique exception of Germany where consumption exceeds production. Key data points are cited accurately, such as China's figures (5,398 and 5,322 billion kWh) and Germany's data. However, the grouping of the remaining countries in the final paragraph is somewhat vague and compressed ('between 530 billion kwh and 1,060 billion kwh'), which reflects a minor tendency to over-generalise rather than fully reporting specific comparisons for the middle tier. Overall, the task is covered well with clear, factual grounding in the visual data, earning a solid Band 6.5 to 7.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response is organized into four paragraphs, following a logical structure with an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs detailing the top and remaining countries. Cohesive devices are used to link ideas, such as 'Overall', 'while, on the other hand', and 'and then at second number'. However, some referencing and punctuation are faulty, notably comma splices and run-on sentences like 'China has the top first country it produced... and then at second number United States stand...'. Paragraphing is present, but internal transitions can be mechanical or awkward, restricting the response to a Band 6.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The student demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully utilizing terms related to the prompt such as 'generation', 'production', 'consumption', and 'billion kwh'. There are some awkward word choices and phrasing, such as 'top first country', 'United States stand', and capitalization errors like 'korea, Rep.' and 'korean, rep.'. Attempts to use less common vocabulary are limited, and spelling/word-choice errors occur occasionally, though they do not impede communication. This performance aligns well with the Band 6 descriptor.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control over grammar and punctuation is inconsistent. There are frequent punctuation errors, including missing full stops, comma splices, and lack of capitalization for proper nouns ('korea, rep.'). Sentences tend to run on without appropriate subordination or coordination, for example: 'Germany produced 526.6 billion kwh and consumed 582.5 billion kwh that only one country who consume more electricity then production'. While meaning remains understandable, grammatical inaccuracies are persistent, placing this submission firmly at Band 5.5.
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