Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chart illustrates the top ten countries for the generation and use of electricity in 2014.
Overall, China has the highest production and consumption of electricity while, on the other hands korea, Rep. has lowest generating and use of electricity and only in Germany electricity consumption is more than electricity production.
China has the top first country it produced 5,398 billion kwh and consumed 5,322 billion kwh and then at second number United States stand with 4,099 billion kwh generated and 3,866 billion kwh used other side korea, rep. generated 485.1 billion kwh and consumed 449.5 billion kwh which is least electricity produced and consumed in all ten countries.
Germany produced 526.6 billion kwh and consumed 582.5 billion kwh that only one country who consume more electricity then production and other countries like Russia, Japan, India, Canada, France and Brazil produced electricity between 530 billion kwh and 1,060 billion kwh and consumed between 450 billion kwh and 1,040 billion kwh.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The student successfully covers all main features of the chart, reporting the top countries for electricity production and consumption in 2014. An appropriate overall trend is identified, highlighting China at the top and noting the unique position of Germany, where consumption exceeded production. Key data points such as the figures for China and the United States are accurately cited, and appropriate comparisons are made between the leading nations and the lowest producers like Korea, Rep. However, there are minor issues with precision in grouping other countries, but overall, the task is well addressed, meeting the requirements for a Band 6.5 or solid Band 6.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response is structured into four paragraphs, providing a logical flow from an introduction to an overview and body paragraphs detailing specific data. Cohesive devices are attempted, such as 'Overall,' 'and then,' and 'other countries like,' but some transitions feel mechanical or run-on, particularly in the second paragraph ('while, on the other hands korea, Rep. has lowest...'). Paragraphing is used adequately to group information, but the lack of punctuation control in longer sentences disrupts the logical progression at times, placing this firmly in the Band 5.5 to 6 range.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The student demonstrates an adequate vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'generation,' 'consumption,' 'production,' and 'highest.' However, there are notable word choice and collocation errors, such as 'on the other hands' instead of 'on the other hand,' 'stand' instead of 'stands,' and 'that only one country who consume' instead of 'the only country that consumed.' Less common vocabulary is attempted with limited success, and spelling or phrasing inaccuracies occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response exhibits a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but it is heavily impacted by run-on sentences and punctuation errors. For instance, the second and third paragraphs consist of very long, comma-spliced sentences lacking full stops (e.g., 'China has the top first country it produced... and then at second number United States stand...'). Grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement ('korea, Rep. has lowest') and tense inconsistencies ('consume' instead of 'consumed'), are frequent and occasionally cause the reader difficulty.
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