Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-24
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The presented column chart illustrates the top ten countries for the generating and concumption of electricity in 2014in which these overseas countries produced electricity in billion KWH and also used it billion KWH.
Overall,after the deep analysis we seen that China dominate in the production of electricity and they also dominated in the concumption of this power. On the othere lest dominate in the power poduction and it's used.
To initiate with, in the ranking of the prodution of electricity in billion KWH China in the top of the table they generated 5,398 billion KWH and also they at top of the table to exhust the electricity which were 5,322 billion KWH. 2nd place took by UK they produced 4,009 billion KWH and deplete 3,866 KWH. they mostly used there energy sources in their textiles industries.Russia in the third spot their dams generated 1,057 billion KWH and exhust 1,038 billion KWH.
Furthermore,the last seven countries generated below than thousand billion KWH and also exhust their energy lower level to thousand billion KWH.These overseas countries like Japan,India,Canada,France,Brazil,Germany and Korea.However,Korea least dominate i the production of electricity and their depletion because Korea produce 485 billion KWH and used 449 billion KWH.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The candidate attempts to cover the main features of the chart, noting that China and the United States lead in production and consumption, and that the other countries produce and consume below 1,000 billion kWh. However, there are significant factual and data errors that pull down the score. For instance, the student misidentifies the United States as 'UK', provides an incorrect production figure for it (writing 4,009 instead of 4,099), and includes irrelevant invented details not found in the chart, such as 'they mostly used there energy sources in their textiles industries' and 'their dams generated'. Furthermore, the overview is extremely vague and awkwardly phrased, lacking a clear summary of the overall trends. Consequently, Task Achievement falls into the Band 5 category.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is divided into four paragraphs, which shows some basic awareness of paragraph structure for an Academic Task 1 response. However, the logical progression is weak and often obscured by awkward phrasing and confusing transitions. Phrases like 'To initiate with' and 'after the deep analysis we seen' are unnatural and mechanical. Referencing is also problematic, as pronouns such as 'they' and 'it' are frequently ambiguous, making it difficult to follow which country is being discussed. Cohesive devices are generally inadequate or incorrectly applied. These issues place the response firmly in Band 5 for Coherence and Cohesion.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The student attempts to use some task-specific vocabulary such as 'production', 'consumption' (spelled 'concumption'), and 'deplete' / 'exhust'. However, there is a very limited range of vocabulary, and spelling and word choice errors are frequent. Words are frequently misused or misspelled, including 'generating', 'concumption', 'othere', 'poduction', 'exhust', and 'dominate' instead of 'dominated'. There is also heavy repetition of basic terms throughout the text. While the general topic is understandable, the numerous lexical errors cause noticeable strain for the reader, fitting the Band 4 descriptor.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical range is quite limited, consisting mostly of simple and attempted complex sentences that are frequently faulty. There are major issues with sentence structure, run-on sentences, and missing verbs or prepositions, such as in 'China in the top of the table they generated...' and 'Korea least dominate i the production'. Punctuation is also poorly managed, with missing full stops and commas creating confusing clauses. Errors are persistent and frequently impede communication, aligning with the Band 4 descriptors.
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