Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar chart illustrates information about the production and the consumption of electricity in major ten cities in 2014.
Overall, it is evident that there were considerable changes among the given countries. China consistently recorded the highest figures, wheras, Korea Republic had the lowest values. In general, most countries showed their usage of electricity and their source of production which is significant low from the other countries.
According to bar chart, China is leading in both production and the consumption as 5,398 and 5,322 respectively. Similarly, United States consumption stood at 3,866 and production recorded 4,099.
In contrast, the other countries usage and out put is loer than the countries which are early mentioned. For example, Russia yield 1,057 and expenditure was 1,038. Hence, the other countries recorded not significant manufacture and utilization of electricity. Therefore, China and United States recorded the highest value of both production and the consumption throughout the 2014.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarise the main features of the chart, noting that China and the US had the highest figures and that other countries had lower values. However, there are significant factual and task-related issues. The student refers to the entities as "cities" rather than countries, and states that there are ten cities, misinterpreting the data entities. Additionally, the overview contains vague and confused generalisations, such as claiming that countries showed their "source of production which is significant low from the other countries." While some specific figures are correctly cited (e.g., China's production and consumption at 5,398 and 5,322), the interpretation of the overall data set lacks clarity and precision.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, starting with an introduction followed by an overview and body paragraphs. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by awkward transitions and confusing phrasing, such as "wheras, Korea Republic had the lowest values" and "In contrast, the other countries usage and out put is loer than the countries which are early mentioned." Cohesive devices are used mechanically or inappropriately, and referencing is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of comparisons smoothly.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The lexical range is limited and repetitive. The student uses basic terms like "production," "consumption," "highest," and "lowest," but struggles with word choice and collocation (e.g., calling countries "cities," using "expenditure" instead of consumption, and "yield" instead of production for Russia). There are also noticeable spelling errors such as "wheras," "loer," and "out put." These lexical inadequacies and inaccuracies occasionally cause strain for the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response exhibits a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying mostly on simple sentences with frequent attempts at complex structures that result in errors. Examples include missing articles and prepositions ("According to bar chart"), incorrect comparative structures ("significant low from the other countries"), and punctuation errors. Frequent grammatical errors can cause some difficulty for the reader in interpreting the intended meaning.
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