Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

THE ABOVE CHART REPRESENTS THE ELECTRIC PRODUCTION AND CONSUMPTION , WHICH STATES THE MOST CONSUMING AND LESS PRODUCTION COUNTRIES , SUCH AS CHINA BEING TOP RANKED WITH 5,398 UNITS PRODUCTION & 5322 UNITS CONSUMED WHICH IS FOLLOWED BY UNITED STATES WITH 4,099 UNITS PRODUCTION & 3866 UNITS CONSUMED .

THEN WE SEE AN DRASTIC FALL IN PRODUCTION AS RUSSIA IS RANKED 3 IN THE LIST WITH 1,057 UNITS OF ELECTRICITY PRODUCED & 1038 UNITS CONSUMED . THEN WE HAVE JAPAN AND INDIA WITH 936 AND 871 UNITS PRODUCED AND 856 & 698 CONSUMED. CANADA IS TOO PRESENT ON 6 PLACE IN THE LEADERBOARD STATED 618 UNITS & 499 . FRANCE AND BRAZIL WITH SIMILAR UNITS 568 & 530 RANKED 7 and 8 . GERMANY IS ALSO RANKED 6 WITH 526 UNITS PRODUCED OVERALL . LAST BUT NOT THE LEAST COMES KOREA WITH AN STAGGERING 485 UNITS BEING OVERALL produced .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The student attempts to cover the main features of the chart by identifying China and the United States as the top countries and mentioning several others in descending order. However, the response suffers from significant organizational issues and inaccuracies in reporting data. For instance, Germany is incorrectly stated as being ranked 6th with 526 units, whereas the chart shows Germany at rank 9 with 526.6 units of production and 582.5 of consumption. Furthermore, the selection of data is somewhat erratic, jumping back and forth rather than providing a clear, structured overview of the top ten countries. The overview is weak, consisting merely of a basic introductory statement rather than a synthesized summary of key trends. Because several figures and rankings are misreported or confused, the task is addressed only partially, warranting a Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The text is written entirely in a single, massive block paragraph, which severely impairs readability and violates standard conventions for academic task 1 responses. Although some basic sequential transitions are used, such as 'then we see' and 'last but not the least', the overall progression lacks clear logical organization. The referencing is frequently confusing, such as mentioning rankings out of order or incorrectly (e.g., stating 'GERMANY IS ALSO RANKED 6' when it is rank 9). Cohesive devices are used mechanically and repetitively, creating a disjointed feel. Paragraphing is absent, which pulls down the score significantly. Overall, the structure reflects Band 4.0 characteristics as information and ideas are not arranged coherently or separated into logical paragraphs.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is largely basic and repetitive, relying on terms like 'units', 'production', 'consumed', and 'ranked'. There are noticeable lexical errors and awkward collocations, such as 'electric production' instead of 'electricity production', 'less production countries' instead of 'countries with lower production', and 'an drastic fall' (which also contains a basic grammatical article error). Attempts at less common vocabulary are either inaccurate or misused, such as 'staggering' applied in a neutral numerical context where it feels out of place. The range is limited and barely adequate for the task, resulting in a Band 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response features a very limited range of sentence structures, primarily consisting of run-on compound-complex sentences joined loosely by conjunctions and participles (e.g., 'such as CHINA BEING TOP RANKED WITH... WHICH IS FOLLOWED BY...'). There are frequent grammatical errors, including punctuation issues, capitalization errors (entire sentences in uppercase), missing articles ('on 6 place' instead of 'in 6th place'), and incorrect article usage ('an drastic fall'). Punctuation is heavily misused with spaces appearing before commas. While meaning can generally be parsed, the high frequency of errors across basic structures limits the score to a Band 4.5.

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