Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar chart illustrates that in 2014 how many electricity was production and utilization in these top ten countries.
Overall, it is clear that these ten top countries from the whole world how many electricity are production and the consumption in 2014.The most noticeble points country ranks and the electricity kWh.
In the 2014,these top ten countries had different productions and utilizations.Firstly,China had 5,398 production and 5322 consumption kWh.And in United States dropped these systems slightly.Russia had 1,057 to 1,038.The Japan country had 936.2 production and 856.7 utilization kWh.And the india had 871production KWh and 698.8 utilization.
In Canada had production 618.9 and consumption 499.9 kWh.On the other hand France had little down than Canada.The Brazil country had 530.7 production and the utilization 455.8 kWh.And the Germany had production is 526.6 kWh while consumption had 582.5 kWh. And the last country Korea Rep had 485.1 production kWh while utilization was 449.5kWh.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the prompt by reporting figures from the bar chart for the top ten countries in 2014. However, the overview is extremely weak, repetitive, and lacks clarity, failing to properly summarise the main trends or general patterns in the data. While some specific data points are mentioned, such as China at 5,398 and 5,322, the description relies heavily on a mechanical listing of individual numbers without adequate selection or meaningful comparison. Furthermore, the expression of data is sometimes confusing, and important comparative features are largely missed. This performance aligns with Band 5, as the task is addressed only partially, and ideas and data points remain somewhat limited and under-developed.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text is divided into paragraphs, but the logical organisation and overall progression are weak. The introduction and overview sentences are heavily repetitive and awkwardly phrased, such as repeating 'how many electricity are production and the consumption in 2014' multiple times. Cohesive devices are used very basic and sometimes inaccurately, with abrupt transitions like 'And in United States dropped these systems slightly' and 'In Canada had production'. Referencing is frequently unclear, making the flow disjointed. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion is faulty and mechanical, placing the response firmly at Band 4.5 to 5.0 range, warranting a Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very limited and repetitive, relying on basic terms such as 'production', 'consumption', 'utilization', and 'kWh'. There are numerous word-choice and collocation errors throughout the response, including non-standard phrases like 'how many electricity was production', 'The Japan country', and 'France had little down than Canada'. Less common lexical items are either absent or incorrectly used. Spelling and word formation are generally understandable, but the restricted vocabulary and persistent lexical inaccuracies constrain the communication, reflecting a Band 5.0 level.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, with frequent basic errors. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at more complex or comparative structures are heavily flawed, as seen in 'in 2014 how many electricity was production and utilization' and 'Germany had production is 526.6 kWh while consumption had 582.5 kWh'. Errors in verb forms, prepositions, articles, and sentence architecture are frequent and often cause difficulty for the reader, obscuring meaning in several places. These persistent grammatical inaccuracies and the lack of structural variety place this response at Band 4.0.
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