Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The bar chart illustrates the top ten countries for production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Overall,the production and consumption in china is in top over all the period,while , united states marked second highest manufacturing and usage in electricty , whereas , russia, japan, india are in decent usage of power and canada, france,brazil and germany had approximently equally using it. In contrast, korea, rep recorded the least usage of both production and consumption.
In production, china recorded the top rank in yeild and exhaustion at 5,398 billions kwh, united states experienced the second highest rank in using the electricty at 4,099 billion kwh and russia,japan and india were the countries accounted almost equally at 1057,936.2 and 871 billion kwh and canada , france, brazil and germany recorded at 618.9, 561.2, 530.7 and 526.6 billions kwh.
In consumption , china was the largest usage of electricty at 5,322 billion kwh and united states recorded the second highest usage at 3,866 billion kwh, whule russia, japan, india experienced slightly decreased country by country at 1,038, 866.7 and 698.8 billion kwh and canada , france , brazil and germany accounted slidely at 499.9, 462.9, 455.8 and 582.5 of billion kwh.In contrast, korea. rep was noticed the lowest uage of consumption at 499.5 billion kwh.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The student attempts to address the task by summarizing the main features of the bar chart, correctly identifying China and the United States as the top two countries in both production and consumption. Key figures such as China's 5,398 billion kWh production and the US 4,099 billion kWh are successfully reported. However, there are notable inaccuracies and confusions in the data handling. For instance, in the final paragraph, the student misreports South Korea's consumption figure as 499.5 billion kWh when the chart states 449.5 billion kWh (and 499.9 belongs to Canada). Furthermore, the overview lacks precision and the grouping of middle-ranking countries is overly convoluted and hard to follow. While the response covers the main trends, the data reporting contains errors that prevent it from reaching a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is organized into an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs covering production and consumption respectively. However, progression is frequently hindered by clumsy referencing and a lack of clear cohesive links. The overview sentence ('Overall,the production and consumption in china is in top over all the period...') is a single, run-on sentence crammed with multiple clauses and poor punctuation. Cohesive devices within sentences are heavily overused and unnatural, such as 'whereas', 'whule', and repetitive chaining of data points using commas rather than structured discourse. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion is weak, resulting in a somewhat mechanical delivery.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for conveying basic numerical data, but it is heavily restricted and marred by numerous lexical and spelling errors. The student attempts less common vocabulary such as 'manufacturing', 'usage', 'yeild', and 'exhaustion', but misapplies them (e.g., 'exhaustion' is inappropriate for electricity generation, and 'yeild' is misspelled). Other spelling mistakes include 'approximently', 'electricty', 'whule', 'slidely', and 'uage'. Phrasing tends to be repetitive, relying constantly on variations of 'recorded', 'experienced', and 'accounted'. The lexical range is limited and imprecise in places.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student attempts complex structures by linking multiple clauses together, but this results in severe control issues. Sentences are frequently over-long and grammatically tangled, such as the opening overview and the lengthy listing sentences in the body paragraphs. There are frequent punctuation errors, such as spaces before commas ('Overall,the'), missing capitalizations ('china', 'united states', 'korea, rep.'), and run-on sentences. While some simple structures are accurate, the high frequency of grammatical and mechanical errors significantly impedes smooth reading and demonstrates weak control over complex sentence forms.
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