Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given bar graph illustrates the top ten nations for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
From an overall analysis, it is evident that the china was at highest position in production and consumption of electricity while the korea had lowest value among other 9 countries.
To expond the chart in detail, the china had largest share in the production of electricity around 5,398 and consumotion rate was 5,322. Moreover, after the china there was an united states that leads in electricity near 4,099 and in consumption was 3,866. In addition, the russian and japan had comeretaly low values in eectricity used represnted at 1,057 and 936.2 rspectively whereas there was decline in their consumptions stood at 1,038 and 856.7. Furthermore, 871 electricity was applied in indian and consumtion at only 698.8.
As further scrutiny reveals, the canada and france were used electricity contibuted to 618.9 and 561.2 while the consumption was 499.9 and 462.9 in each countries. However, 530.7 electricity was produced by brazil.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The student successfully covers the main features of the prompt by identifying the top ten countries for electricity production and consumption in 2014. An overview is provided, highlighting China as the highest and Korea as the lowest. Key data points are correctly cited, such as China's production at 5,398 billion kWh and consumption at 5,322 billion kWh. However, there is a tendency to list figures rather than synthesise or group the data effectively, and some comparisons lack depth. Minor inaccuracies in country naming and phrasing occur, but all parts of the task are appropriately addressed, aligning well with the Band 6 descriptor.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response is arranged logically into four paragraphs, beginning with an introduction and overview, followed by detailed body paragraphs. However, the progression within paragraphs is sometimes hindered by mechanical and repetitive transitions such as 'Moreover', 'In addition', and 'Furthermore'. Referencing is also occasionally unclear or unnatural, such as 'the china' or 'the russia'. Paragraphing is used sufficiently to structure the information, but the overall cohesion requires smoother logical links to reach a higher band level, placing it solidly at Band 6.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The student uses an adequate vocabulary range to describe the chart, including terms such as 'production', 'consumption', 'share', and 'decline'. However, there are frequent word-choice errors, incorrect forms, and missing articles (e.g., 'the china', 'the united states', 'the russian', 'applied in indian'). Less common vocabulary is attempted with limited success or awkward collocation, such as 'To expond the chart in detail' and 'comeretaly low values'. These errors occasionally draw attention, but they do not impede overall communication, reflecting Band 5.5 to 6.0 descriptors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
The response includes a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control over grammar and punctuation is inconsistent. There are frequent grammatical errors, particularly regarding capitalization ('china', 'united states'), missing or incorrect prepositions/articles ('was at highest position', 'in consumption was 3,866'), and awkward passive/active voice confusions ('the canada and france were used electricity contibuted to'). While the sentences are generally understandable, errors persist throughout the text, restricting the score to Band 5.5.
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