Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 13 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The bar chart illustrates the electricity production and consuption amount in kWh of top ten countries of 2014.
Overall, China had the highest amount of electricity production and consumption among all countries, whereas Korea had lowest amount of electricity production comsuption than others in 2014. Another noticeable fact was that Germany's electricity consumption was higher than it's production in 2014.
In terms of Production, China produced 5398 billions kWh electricity. USA produced 4099 billions kWh electricity, was the second highest in the list. Russsia, Japan and India produced 1057, 936.2 and 871 billions kWh of energy respectively in 2014. Canada, France, Brazil and Germany generated 618.9, 561.2, 530.7 and 526.6 billions kWh power respectively. Korea Rep. produced 485.1 billions kWh electricity.
In consumption, China consumed 5398 billions kWh energy. America consumed 3866 billions kWh power. Russsia, Japan and India consumed 1038, 856.7 and 689.8 billions kWh of energy respectively. Canada, France, Brazil and Germany used 499.9, 492.9, 455.8 and 582.5 billions kWh power respectively in 2014. Korea Rep. consumed 449.5 billions kWh energy.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
The candidate successfully covers all key features of the bar chart, providing a clear overview and reporting data for all ten countries in terms of both production and consumption. The main trends are identified, such as China ranking first and Korea ranking last. However, there is a minor data error in the consumption paragraph where China's consumption is stated as '5398 billions kWh' (which was actually the production figure, with consumption being 5322), and India's consumption is inaccurately reported as 689.8 instead of 698.8. Despite these occasional inaccuracies, the response effectively addresses all parts of the task and presents a well-structured summary of the visual data.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response is logically organized with a clear four-paragraph structure comprising an introduction, an overview, and separate body paragraphs for production and consumption. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate different categories of data. Cohesive devices such as 'In terms of Production' and 'In consumption' are used to guide the reader through the data points. However, referencing is occasionally repetitive, and logical progression within the body paragraphs relies heavily on listing figures rather than synthesizing the information more fluidly. Nevertheless, the overall arrangement remains coherent and easy to follow throughout the text.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The candidate demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary suitable for an academic task, using terms such as 'illustrates', 'production', 'consumption', and 'respectively'. However, there are notable spelling errors, such as 'consuption' instead of 'consumption' and 'Russsia' instead of 'Russia'. Additionally, word form and collocation errors appear, such as writing 'billions kWh' instead of 'billion kWh'. While the vocabulary used is sufficient to communicate the main features of the chart, these lexical inaccuracies and repetitive phrasing prevent the response from achieving a higher band score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
The response displays a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, utilizing relative clauses such as 'was the second highest in the list'. Grammatical control is generally fair, though several errors occur, including missing prepositions and articles (e.g., 'Korea had lowest amount', 'higher than it's production' where 'its' should be used without the apostrophe). Punctuation and sentence structures are mostly clear enough to ensure that communication is rarely impeded, placing the writing comfortably within the Band 6 descriptor for grammar.
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